layers

you peel away
the layers
of pain
in my heart.

slowly
with the delicacy
of flower-petal
prayers.

i am shocked into
submission
by the fact that
someone cares.

the stamen of
my starry-eyes
cradles the scent
of something new.

i scurried swift into
the earth
but blossom slowly
just for you.

i unfold
to the sunshine
and offer
nectar sweet

how can I wither
when I'm folded deep
within
your heat.

i sleep now
with the soft, sweet
delirium of
dreams.

to the promise
of my petals
and silky earthen
streams.

the fading fragrance
of my soul
has begun to shiver
and expand.

suddenly I feel
capable
of the strength
which life demands.

yes…

you peel away
these layers
in my heart.
 

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Where do I begin again... damn Kara once again your words leave me trying ti find the right ones worthy of praise for you work... this speaks so gently of how love can heal those emotional scars of the past like neosporen... I've read many thing on the subject and written them myself but the way you phrase it is divine...

i scurried swift into
the earth
but blossom slowly
just for you.

like this stanza what a way to say you are coming out of your protected state to take a chance on something you know is real. I could go on and on... the beauty in your words are like that of a red rose blooming.

[Val Val]

I loved the lines:
"i scurried swift into
the earth
but blossom slowly
just for you."

:-) Good, good piece.

[Luke Brooks]

suddenly I feel
capable
of the strength
which life demands.

To me thats about the best thing you can say about someone (lover, friend, or family). I've had people basically carry through times I didn't think I would make it through. I've had people make my life instantly better just by entering the room. Someone who gives you strength is a good person to keep around.

Great job on this.

[Whisperer]

"you peel away
these layers
in my heart."

It takes considerable skill to carry the matephor throughout the poem and you have done it with brilliance. This is a very poignant piece! I liked it very much.

Keep writing.

[Gandré]

"the fading fragrance of my soul has begun to shiver and expand. " ========>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>I like this, how you say this image of getting stronger a great job, my dear, hugs.

[Matthew M. Stewart]

Just like everyone else - I love this work! Excellent use of metaphor through out. The poem stands great on its own, then is catapulted into a more sensuous existence with the addition of your voice - amazing!

[Robert Rumery]

Wow, that was bad a*s. So serene and peaceful. I really enjoyed it! :) I really suck at giving reviews.. lol

[MAC]

this is so gentle, hmmm, like that first warm shower in May that wishes to do nothing more than wake up the sleeping moments of spring with a soft little "hello, it's me". this was that kind of sincere and purposeful yet lovely.

[Ron Cole]

This is wonderful, Kara! Makes me wish I were a HoneyBee, able to taste the nectar! Excellent use of metaphors here, and a very enjoyable read!

[Rebirth And Introspecti..]

at the risk of sounding rhedundant... wow. On this note, I'm hooked... women are flowers, it's been said before, compared before, noted before... but never, I think, like this.