through the fog

 

i drove through the fog
to hold you /
to mold you to the curves
of my smile.
to lay you upon linens
and purr beside you
as we slip into silky sleep.

i drove through the fog
to kiss you
with the tender tendency of time.
as it slips away / i embrace the ways
and the days that you are mine.
in this hidden haven
tucked into the corners
of the sky.

i drove through the fog
to reach you
with the slow measure
of momentary calm.
knowing soon i would fold you
into the pockets of
my palms.
then kiss the secret
shadows
of your seas.

I drove through the fog
to touch you
with the gentle eyelash
of my heart.
to nourish you softly
with the nectar from
my lips.
we could learn the taste of
something
sweet and new.

it took me a while,
but i drove through the fog...

i drove through the fog
to you.

Reviews

[Sarah Williams]

This oozes with beautiful romance... Each line seemed to top the one before it, until finally I came to the end and I was left wanting more! There are just too many exquisit lines for me to site all of the ones that I like. There is something about driving through the fog (something that I did quite often when I was going to college) and dreaming of being with the one that you love that is truly magical. Great work!

[Edward Beaman]

I like the romance of this poem. It perhaps needs touching up here and there though.
I'm slightly wondering why you used the slash (/), instead of a comma.

'then kiss the secret
shadows
of your seas.'

Seas of what? His emotions? saliva? he is sailor?

'to touch you
with the gentle eyelash
of my heart.
to nourish you softly
with the honey from
my lips.'

This is great!

I liked it overall.

[april showers bring may..]

Incredible, it made me feel so very wistful...

[Alicia]

love love love

[Nihad Dweidary]

Your imagery is incredible. The poem was delectable enough for me to read it many times, and enjoy it over an over again with every reading. I read a lot of your poetry, but though most of what you write impresses me, this one is my personal favorite. It is right up my alley because it is romantic in more ways than one.

Love, -Nihad

[Aaron Burnette]

sounds like a poem about TRUE love...a very rare thing these days...with most of the population being selfish and such...it was very beautifully crafted and designed...very clear in the message and loved the internal rhyme and iliteration...very gorgeous...

[Richard K]

No wonder you were so happy about writing this poem. Your emotions are once again laid upon the page with perfection. My heart simply loves your writing. :p

[John Destalo]

I absolutely love this poem. I don't understand how anyone could read this
and not be moved to write a review.