i drove through the fog
to hold you /
to mold you to the curves
of my smile.
to lay you upon linens
and purr beside you
as we slip into silky sleep.
i drove through the fog
to kiss you
with the tender tendency of time.
as it slips away / i embrace the ways
and the days that you are mine.
in this hidden haven
tucked into the corners
of the sky.
i drove through the fog
to reach you
with the slow measure
of momentary calm.
knowing soon i would fold you
into the pockets of
my palms.
then kiss the secret
shadows
of your seas.
I drove through the fog
to touch you
with the gentle eyelash
of my heart.
to nourish you softly
with the nectar from
my lips.
we could learn the taste of
something
sweet and new.
it took me a while,
but i drove through the fog...
This oozes with beautiful romance... Each line seemed to top the one before it, until finally I came to the end and I was left wanting more! There are just too many exquisit lines for me to site all of the ones that I like. There is something about driving through the fog (something that I did quite often when I was going to college) and dreaming of being with the one that you love that is truly magical. Great work!
As a poet I've always had an appreciation for vocabulary that appeals to the senses and really creates an image of your feelings. You accomplish that very well.
Holy. Damn. I just got around to revisiting this piece - you know, since you've added the Evoca - and I must say that your voice carries precisely the tenderness required to make the feelings mentioned herein more poignant and relatable. You also carry a very clever, very studied sense of eloquence about yourself - you're among the most well-spoken people I know, I'd say. Your voice makes this piece more alive than it ever was before, and considering the momentous amount of admiration I had originally, I find that it's now perfect.
amazing. truly a great poem. I'm still shocked from your voice. how very wonderful it is. the repitition worked perfeclty! especially at the end. I love this. the alliteration is great and the flow of your voice just finalizes this already great piece.
I am resolved to never be content with the lives of "quiet desperation" which so many of us lead, to continuously challenge myself, and forever walk in Beauty.
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