through the fog

 

i drove through the fog
to hold you /
to mold you to the curves
of my smile.
to lay you upon linens
and purr beside you
as we slip into silky sleep.

i drove through the fog
to kiss you
with the tender tendency of time.
as it slips away / i embrace the ways
and the days that you are mine.
in this hidden haven
tucked into the corners
of the sky.

i drove through the fog
to reach you
with the slow measure
of momentary calm.
knowing soon i would fold you
into the pockets of
my palms.
then kiss the secret
shadows
of your seas.

I drove through the fog
to touch you
with the gentle eyelash
of my heart.
to nourish you softly
with the nectar from
my lips.
we could learn the taste of
something
sweet and new.

it took me a while,
but i drove through the fog...

i drove through the fog
to you.

Reviews

[Sarah Williams]

This oozes with beautiful romance... Each line seemed to top the one before it, until finally I came to the end and I was left wanting more! There are just too many exquisit lines for me to site all of the ones that I like. There is something about driving through the fog (something that I did quite often when I was going to college) and dreaming of being with the one that you love that is truly magical. Great work!

[Mr. Lopez]

Having grown up in the central California, I associate the fog with young love, first kisses, innocence lost.
every bit the great poem.
to nourish you softly
with the nectar from
my lips.
we could learn the taste of
something
sweet and new.
Love these lines. thanks.

[Val Val]

I love this one. Especially the beginning lines:
i drove through the fog
to hold you /
to mold you to the curves
of my smile.

:-)

[Luke Brooks]

Just beautiful.
Truly.

I drove through the fog
to touch you
with the gentle eyelash
of my heart.
to nourish you softly
with the nectar from
my lips.
we could learn the taste of
something
sweet and new.

I mean seriously that's about as gorgeous as it gets.
Perfect blend of sensual and sweet.
And the ending was perfect too.

I normally don't get into the whole evoca thing.
Cause I catch myself reading it in a different way.
But I really think you read it perfectly too.

Really great job Kara.
It definately a favorite.

[Maria Retz]

Oh, this poem is lovely. You read it aloud in such a way that I hardly could breathe. Thank you, thank you, thank you for sharing this. I have not words to say how it makes me feel. There is simply not one word strong enough to explain it

[Elle Blaisure]

This is a very beautiful poem, you really have a gift with words. I really enjoyied reading it. Great work!

-Elle B.

[Ed Rector]

i enjoyed the "i did this for you and this is why" aspect of the poem. i enjoy repeditive poems because they get an image planted into your head. Although this piece didn't repeat images it repeated that aspect i talked about above. good job.

[JP thinks the WC is apt..]

Some wonderful lines and images. There are some lovely echoes throughout this piece, lines like: "corners of the sky," "shadows of your seas", "pockets of your palms."

Some very initmite and gorgeous imagery and I love the emergence at the end.

[Doug]

"to touch you
with the gentle eyelash
of my heart."

I really love that line a lot. I'm jealous that I didn't think of that one. But hearing you read the poem made me enjoy the poem so much more. You do have a great reading voice. You definitely need to do that more.

[Doug Case]

Wow...this is the second evoca I've heard from you, and they were both wonderful. You have such a nice tone to your voice (I don't know if that's the right terminology, but I do love your voice). I really like this poem, as well - it's simple, repeating just the right portions, soft, and loving. You use alliteration very well here, warming the reader to a sense of comfort (even though they just got out of fog). It's almost like "the gentle eyelash of my heart."

I'm putting this one in my library!

[Pierce Franklin]

"i drove through the fog
to reach you
with the slow measure
of momentary calm."

I had to think about this one for a while, but once I realised what it was it only seemed more wonderful. I love this one, there are so many great lines and images that I don't know where to begin - every line is perfect. I only wish I wasn't at work so I could listen to the recording as well.