i want to touch you / with my words

I want to touch you with my words…
Watch them skim across your skin.
Sigh as the shivers of your breath
Inhale and breathe them in.

There’s a need within my breast
Begging for sweet reprieve;
My words, they fall and filter through you
Like sunshine through the leaves.

I want to move you with the soft
Slow hymn of my heart.
In part, I want to please you
(or perhaps just to tease you…)
But in the end I want you satisfied,
By all the words you hold inside.

The words I place upon your palm
As my eyes, they whisper a silent psalm.
I want to woo you with my words
(watch them lay peaceful upon your smile)
Beguile you awhile with the cadence of my ways

I want to touch you with my words…
Until there’s nothing left to say.

Reviews

[Fran Marie]

I want to woo you with my words
(watch them lay peaceful upon your smile)
Beguile you awhile with the cadence of my ways

I want to touch you with my words�
Until there's nothing left to say.

a very well crafted and exquisitely penned piece of writing~ Love the ine
"Beguile you awhile with the cadence of my ways'~ Great writE!~Fran Marie

[Kevinhouse]

I like this poem. Especially the last couple of lines. And the way that the title works with this poem is amazing. Well done... very well done. And to be honest, I'm not always fond of rhyming in poems just because sometimes people really force out rhymes that slaughter the poem. The rhyming in this poem is just subtle enough. Not overdone.

[Haden]

hungry and peaceful, structured and soothing. nicely done.

[Ron Cole]

Kara, this could be the prayer of every poet! It is well structured, and delightful to read! Nice work!

[Jazlean]

"I want to touch you with my words�
Until there�s nothing left to say."

brilliant and beautiful and full of meaning and for me two seperate meanings..the first being the want to be loved and the second that your writing be loved...
now wether it be one or the other or both i can relate, now i only wish that one day i could write peotry as good as this...
well done,
~Jazlean

[Aka; Donnie (ramone) Ka..]

Wow! Your poems leave me in awe, this one in particular. Such a joy to read.

[Anhedonia 1349]

Can I ditto the title? Or how about the last couplet? I think both of those capture the way this piece leaves the reader feeling, and while I tend to flock to pieces that get their names from a small little section at the very end of the piece, I think you did the same thing here. Works like those (Erik Bergstrom's Evil Don't Look Like Nothin comes to mind) some how manage to tie up all the loose ends with a single reference; I feel as though you sufficiently did the same thing here which in itself is remarkable. I think that adds a completeness to the poem that most poetry (including mine) always seems to lack.I love the rhyme scheme. It's genius, but not in and of itself - only because the length of the lines work so well with it. You picked precisely the right words to force the flow, in a sense; the reader has to read it only one certain way to capture the essence of the line and in so doing, the rhyme scheme is made that much more poignant. That's superb as well.I want to move you with the soft Slow hymn of my heart. In part, I want to please you (or perhaps just to tease you�) But in the end I want you satisfied, By all the words you hold inside.

[Jacob White Owl]

This is a cut above! This is more like you! A deep meaning and color in the words.Jacob

[Kara Emily Krantz]

Flint:

i dont mind you saying that at all.. but in fact, i actually didn't write this about anyone in particular!! haha... it's just the way i feel... it's the way i WANT to feel about someone. i was with someone for a long time whom i never touched with my words, so my dream would be to do so.

[Flint Easthood]

It really is a beautiful poem... but if I wrote something like this I wouldn't show it to anyone else except to the person I was thinking of while I was writing it...
maybe because it seems impossible to write a poem like this without having those feelings for someone and somehow I don't see how the opinion of anyone else matters, at all...
hope you don't mind me saying so...

[Richard K]

That was absoultely beautiful. I have to agree with the above statement completely.