treebark honey & the hoods of his eyes

 

crazy how a moment

can twist your gut

into itself.

 

he looks at me with the hoods of his eyes raised

(just enough)

to pierce me with his gaze.

 

'lookin' good today, ms.krantz.'

he uses the title like it's something kinky -

something he could slide over my skin

some secret night.

 

his voice reminds me of honey off treebark

and the click-clicking of my boots

go cur-clump.

 

just a slight trip / a stumble

and -i'm cut down to a stump-  

 

i continue down the hall

without a single back-wards glance

for i refuse to see the way his lips

are surely curling.

 

crazy how a moment

can strip you of whatever pieces of adulthood

you've managed to acquire.

 

and you're just a little girl with honey

on the treebark

of her hands.

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[robin]

something he could slide over my skin
some secret night

I love this because it's soooo descriptive of the creepy, possessive, invasive, masking, impersonal aspect of his glance and touch, but the secret night was more than once this tawdry taboo delight. If we're paying attention, how curious it is we find comfort in familiar deviance, and return for more like an all you can eat buffet. Whoo! Is it getting warm in here? Darn sticky honey!

[Rylan Batten]

very good, with really nice wording. You really made me not like this guy. A lot is accomplished in this short poem, thanks for sharing

[curley]

=)). love it!! the first stanza is particularly meaningful to me, because time and time again, I am shown how fast things can change in a single moment. "something he could slide over my skin some secret night." < perfect. thanks for sharing! God bless.

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

wow. wow. wow. you are one of my favorites on this site for sure. your poems are amazing. this one is really good, the imagrey is very unique. thanks for sharing.

[An owl on the moon]

Amazing piece. Somehow you create a world that is so full and alive; a world I only wish there was more of... So visual and emotive with each line dripping with honey!

[AK]

Well now this was a little different. I was starting to get a little concerned for your safety about half way through but then it all came together nicely. Still though, be careful around some of these kids. It 'aint like it used to be when teachers were safe and only the kids got bullied.

[W.k.kortas]

Very insightful and well-constructed look at your own particular "Blackboard Jungle" moment. The lining and stanza breaks are judiciously chosen. A very solid piece of work.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

'lookin' good today, ms.krantz.'
he uses the title like it's something kinky -
something he could slide over my skin
some secret night."- I liked this one a lot! :D

A nice write with an awesome flow!!
Great piece :)