lifesoul

I am ignoring the soul of my life.

I am forcing personal constructs into a world
which will not accept

my faulty figments.

Foolishly I hold on to fading colors
attempting to imbue my life with personal rainbows
using a medium that continues to wash away.

I am ignoring the soul of my life.

Repeatedly I strive for that which [I believe]
keeps me alive
yet only succeeds in destroying something deep
[deep inside]

the re-appraisal process
is begging to begin - to let something
more effective than [delusions] in.

I am discounting the purest pieces
of the soulful part of me.
-ignoring fears by imploring tears-
avoiding the possibility of being
wrong all these years.
 
I am ignoring the soul of my life.

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Well since you have nothing new I need to go into your catoluge and get my fix of your words...
I fell upon this little gem...

So true that we can get lost in what we think we want that we begin to lose who we really are that's why this verse really hit me...

Repeatedly I strive for that which [I believe]
keeps me alive
yet only succeeds in destroying something deep
[deep inside]


Once again you takes us on a journey of deep feelings with such divine ease... this is why I find you to be one of the greatest writers I have ever known.

[Robert Luna]

I enjoyed this a lot. I am sure it is just me but I related to this in a way others might not. As I read this I envisioned someone get a tattoo. I know that sound strange but let me explain. Because getting a tattoo is a life change experiences on many different levels. One you changing the outer you by adding it to your body. Then you also in a way change the you that other people see. Now you have become something or some one else in their eyes. And also you change yourself spiritually as well because getting tattoo can be an experiences on a level which you never have encountered. Between the pain and pleasure often something opens inside you that is amazing.

But like I said it is just me and my crazy imagination.
Great job loved it
Robert

[Sarah]

I Absolutely Love this poem... I feel it... it speaks the truth... I love your visionary ideas... "I am ignoring the soul of my life." makes you really think... if what we are doing is for ourselves or others... it is hard to be true to our soul when we feel stuck/trapped... Keep on writing...it is amazing... Sarah

[Gandré]

you didn't know? perpaps looking for the spiritual part of yours...

This is true...very true :
"the re-appraisal process
is begging to begin - "

.adventures of the soul....are written in the past and read in the future....maybe.....

[Taubah Blackman]

Wow girl,

You are deep and this is really good. I love it... I FEEL it yo know.
thanks for sharing it.

[Ron Cole]

This is so incisive, and the message brilliant! The truth is, we are rarely right, even if that is our design and we want to be, except when chance favors us. There is always more than one right answer to a question, and some of the most profound things that occur in our lives occur because of our mistakes!! This is very profound, and your insight is remarkable!

[Carole Stretch]

pure, touching...well done!

Carrie

[Richard K]

I dig the entire structure of this one.

'foolishly I hold on to fading colors
attempting to imbue my life with personal rainbows
using a medium
that continues to wash
away.'

That metaphor is beautiful. Once again you continue to express the emotion flawlessly.

[Rc R. Vagilidad]

"I am neglecting the purest pieces
of the soulful part of me
-ignoring fears by imploring tears-"---wow...these lines were just out for sale!! great! sumptuous....

hmm. the capitalization bamboozle doesn't affect the whole constrcutiveness...afterall, it's still a unique style of yours...and musn't be a consideration at all...GREAT! 5stars

[Trisha Clark]

I think I liked [especially] that you only capitalize "I". Sometimes I do that when I'm writing about nate... to remind myself that I am more important to me than he is.

You missed it twice, but both times it was when you were showing doubt. So I liked it when you didn't capitalize it.

Of course, my punctuation and grammar are usually very moody, so maybe I am looking into it too hard.

;)

Maybe someday I will give you less than 5. Not today, though.