farewell

oh my love.

you touched me
and i trembled.

you kissed me
and i cried.

please do not forget me.

i am never far from you.

oh my love.

we lay wrapped
within each other
and i felt your heart
beat against my palm.

i will place this balm
upon my chest
and pray it penetrates
all the way through

for my heart is bleeding

it is bleeding for you.

please do not forget me.

for i am never far from you.

oh my love.

Reviews

[Starlight]

my own lonliness is complete after reading this...

[Maria G.]

I truly identify with this piece, such beautiful heartfelt words, i feel the pain in this poem..

[Rc R. Vagilidad]

you made me inhaled...the coolness of the balm that easily penetrates my mind...my lonely mind...this is so wonderful!!! y, can't i just put all your works into my faves list...isn't it nice, and would you mind???? it seems evrytime i look up for your piece, i get some deep thoughts 'bout them........

[Pierce Franklin]

"I will place this balm
upon my chest
and pray it penetrates
all the way through"

Very, very nice...

[Lauren Xena Campbell]

I really like it

[Kira Jade]

Simply beautiful. I love it.

~Kira~

[Anhedonia 1349]

Wow. I've never encountered anyone who felt as insignificant as this piece makes me think you feel. "Please do not forget me," like a child who's been beaten beyond repair and placed somewhere dark and cold to wait, wait until whatever. Wait until absolution. I can see that child's mind racing vividly, with hate, with anger, but all the while thinking only, "Come back and get me; please don't forget me".

I'm sorry - sorry for the way this person made you feel. It's obviously not a child abuse poem - that was just a really bad analogy on my part. It's obviously a poem to someone you love. The fact that your lover made you feel such feelings makes me sorry, but at the same time, I'm not; for you to feel these, you had to have truly been in love. Being in love like that is a wonderful thing, except when it ends in heartbreak.

I hope the seasons can mend your heartbreak. Have a happy holiday and, oh. Favorite.

[Crystal]

You break my heart, dear. I've never heard you speak, yet I can only imagine a soft voice... your words are so tender and wanting. This gave me chills!

please do not forget me

The ache in that one line alone is so vivid!
Again, a brilliant piece fueled by what can only be a devestating love.