you will continue to break [my heart]

you will continue to break

my heart.

 

in the morning (when i wake)

and in the evening

when i take off

my pretty dress.

 

-the lack of your caress-

will confuse me.

 

and dreams of you will infuse

my sleep.

 

you will continue to break

my heart

as i dream

(as i seem to move forward)

and forget.

 

you will be breaking my heart

even as i let

[you go]

 

even as life moves on

and i learn to get along

without you.

 

it seems a foolish notion

but i am very much aware

(as the wind blows through my hair)

-your breath at my neck-

 

for you still perfect

-the art-

 

of stealing,

healing,

and breaking

 

my heart.

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

How breathtakingly heartbreaking... the power of you words once again sink deep into my senses... how true it is that even after a break up we can still feel that person like a ghost by our side and even as time goes on certain thoughts of that person can still cause our hearts to crack even more... Fantastic work once again sweet panda.

[Aaron Sturgis]

Fabulous. Your use of parentheses and spacing (and even bracketing!) is perfect. The poem itself is simplistic, but the way it's written is almost imbued with passion. It evokes imagery in such a way that I could see a torn lover getting her heart broken and restored - only to be broken again and again. I love it.

[The Random Writings Of ..]

This piece flows so freely, shows emotion and pain. Questions that your heart needs an answer too, questions that hurt your soul, but may never be answered. Will you continue to break my heart? When do we say enough is enough, hurt deep in your heart is worst kind of pain, in a relationship, losing family friends and all that goes along. Reading this piece is a realization of my heart at this time.
Wonderful!
xoxo

[Father Mojo]

i just wrote this long, brilliant review and somehow it was lost while loading the next page. i don't know if i can do it again.

basically what i said was that, whether it was intentional or not, i like the way that you use rhyme in the opening stanzas without actually highlighting the fact that you're employing rhyme--i.e. confuse and infuse; wake and take; dream and seem. by not placing the rhymes at the end of lines you have created a sort of subliminal rhyme scheme--a rhyme scheme for the subconscious. it actually inspires me to want to experiment with the possiblility of writing poems with rhyme and meter but doing it in an odd way.

thematically, i don't think that there is much to comment on--it's a universal topic complete with the advantages of such a topic (everyone can relate to it) and the disadvantes of such a topic (every one has read something like it before). since it has been done so many times before by probably everyone who has ever scribble lines on a page, i can only assume that the primary motivation for such a poem is pure catharsis--which isn't a bad thing since catharsis is a major part of art. whereas everyone else in the world is trying to conceal their dirty laundry, the artist invites everyone in the world to come look at her soiled nickers.

i hope this review was slightly more constructive.

p.s. can someone steal what is freely given away?

[jen -- JG]

Kara. this is well put otgether. It sells the pain of breakup - recovery and how the every day things can invoke a memory and cause pain. A few words and a heartbreak is revealed - in a few words you show that while you try to move on - the memory of lost love still hurts. I know a person such as you speak of here

"for you still perfect

-the art-



of stealing,

healing,

and breaking



my heart."

Well done Kara - you made me feel the poem.

[Mariah]

i love it. ! so so completely true. !
but is this supposed to say "your"
"
for you still perfect

-the art-
"

but amazing. :]

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is beautifully sad. The way you've poured out your emotions in the piece is really commendable
I even loved the overall flow and spontaneity of the piece..
So..Its overall a worth read..
Thanks for sharing it here

-Bhavya

[Sara Muschweck]

Just lovely, it is always hard to recover from a broken relationship when all around you are reminders of their touch on your skin, and no matter the time that has passed they still have the power to "break your heart". Wonderful write.

[A.J. Smith]

Kara, wow, you are very good...glad we bumped into each other in the cafe. I really like your lines: "... -the lack of your caress- will confuse me...and dreams of you will infuse my sleep..." these just flow and sound so nice when read aloud. And, I must say, your ending is awesome.