Windswept

inspired by this picture of my friend, Jess

she feels alive
[today]

perhaps it's in the way
he smiles against her neck
and she deliriously / deliciously
breathes in his scent.

these moments are merely lent to us...
a voice inside her whispers
as she slips off her slippers
and falls into the sea.

but [today] she feels alive
and all such a feeling implies.
it tickles inside her fingers
and lingers
at the tip of her tongue.

she's happy today
[happy to be young]

she's alive like the wind,
amd the way it kisses her skin.

she's alive with the memory
of these moments
with him.

Reviews

[Aaron]

Five stars from everyone and I couldn't agree more. You are good... darn good. I love your words. Also the flow is really floweee... I'll join the crowd.

[Laura]

I really loved this one. "She's alive like the wind, and the way it kisses her skin." is just beautiful. I always enjoy reading your work.

[Marc Mccune]

whispy and light. A good description of how the day and her scene reflects her mind.

Like one of those days that are extra bright, if for no other reason, than the love and lightness in one's heart.

Nicely and well written.

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[You Don't Know Me]

this is absolutely beautiful.
these moments are merely lent to us...
a voice inside her whispers
as she slips off her slippers
and falls into the sea
such a delicate image. I loved it.

[Trisha Clark]

these moments are merely lent to us...

Yup.

You are fantastic.

[Mary Brown]

Wow...this is definitely a favorite.

[Tedefroberts]

A real joy to read! I enjoy this style...you ARE quite talented!

[Roger F Aucoin]

Very nice. You may have a typo in 'amd' in the next to last paragraph.

[Kasia A. Tilander]

This was such a lovely, tender poem.

these moments are merely lent to us...
a voice inside her whispers
as she slips off her slippers
and falls into the sea.

I'm so glad that I choose to come here before I went to sleep tonight for I will take this feeling with me into my sleep tonight.

Kasia.

[Kurt]

beautiful poem..... sweet sentiment for someone that makes you feel alive...