Windswept

inspired by this picture of my friend, Jess

she feels alive
[today]

perhaps it's in the way
he smiles against her neck
and she deliriously / deliciously
breathes in his scent.

these moments are merely lent to us...
a voice inside her whispers
as she slips off her slippers
and falls into the sea.

but [today] she feels alive
and all such a feeling implies.
it tickles inside her fingers
and lingers
at the tip of her tongue.

she's happy today
[happy to be young]

she's alive like the wind,
amd the way it kisses her skin.

she's alive with the memory
of these moments
with him.

Reviews

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ahh like a soothing bubble bath, you have done it again emily.

[~ Tex]

Warm and fuzzy. Youthful love.

[JlB]

Yeah this poem is cute, I like how it makes me feel inside, and I like it better with the parts you took out [happy to be young, etc...]

good job,

Jl

[Candid Writer]

Awww. the poem depicts what I see in this picture very well. Even if I had not seen the picture, I would have loved the beautiful imagery you painted with your choice of words. Very affectionate.

[Shannon Drake]

this was deffinately something i enjoyed reading. i like your style.

"perhaps it's in the way
he smiles against her neck
and she deliriously / deliciously
breathes in his scent."

--was this a way for someone to say their opinion on which word to use? if so--both are good, but i would have to say deliriously. B/c this whole thing is talking about the memory of him, and it seems to fit better.

i love the repetition with the "she is happy today." it describes a lot of girls who are more down than up--and when they have their good days, theyre amazing.

i think that was what you were going for. and i loved every word of this.

cant wait to read more of your stuff.

[L. Thomack]

This was hmm different then my usual type of read was a bit thrown off by the non rhyme and then goe to rhyme and back away from it once again...Other then this I like the content and how it flowed other then the ryhme problem..Very good work keep it up.

[Tylernol]

I like that this was inspired by one of your friends and wasn't merely a personal experience. Its a beautiful observation :]

[Rc R. Vagilidad]

oh, memories, these are great points to ponder, well, you can get enough of words from a saddened memories like reminiscing the scents that linger the time you can't forget, perhaps, the moment with your love in such a wonderful place as the shoreline...this one's great!! i commend you for having written this based on your memories...

PS. Just an interpretation

[Dante Sedulous]

Be proud you are the author of this gem! For me, this work breathes a kind of Zen tranquility, emotional and yet at peace, balanced, becoming one, accepting the moment for what it is. Wonderful.

[Maggie Smith]

Kara;
I thought I would look at your work as well. This poem reminds me of how "we" used to be; way back when. Before life got in the way.
This is a very touching and beautiful piece. I hope you were the one to be that happy.
M.S.