spanish poetry

if i read you
pablo neruda
with faux spanish lilts
will you smile at me
deliciously

listen to the inflections
in my voice
until we fall asleep
in a blanket
of momentos silenciosos.

if i read you
spanish poetry
will you
adóreme.

remind me of kindness
with your warm
liquid eyes.
i barely comprehend
all the parts of you
i recognize.

if i sing you
pablo neruda
to the sounds of
your guitar
are we sharing music
or poetry
or perhaps
it is
eternity.

mira...
how your silent moments
awaken such sweet
sounds
in me.
 

Reviews

[Nihad Dweidary]

This evoca can easily melt the most intractable brick. This is surely worthy of another visit, Karabelle.

I am so delighted to have featured your work this week. I have no doubt that a plethora of authors are able to walk away with a wonderful sense of satisfaction when reading your poems. They are the brightest flowers in the garden, begging to be felt, smelt, and tenderly caressed. I love these lines:

i barely comprehend
all the parts of you
i recognize.

Love, -Nihad

[Sean Allen]

I Love the mixing of language in this piece, or is it the mixing of two people that I like. I don't know Neruda, sadly I suspect.
sa

[Terra Bee]

This poem is sweet and flowingly, the words are like honey on my tongue, I love it very much.

-x-Ashley

[Why Stay?]

Oh, it is so hott when someone works foreign words into a poem...
I love the last stanza...
'mira...
how your silent moments
awaken such sweet
sounds
in me.'

Spacing is good, too.
Yes, it is lovely to attend to the smaller things, the details in life, or in a lover...
Thanks for making me take a moment.
~ami~

[Misha London]

this is lovely.
i LOVE the first stanza...
"smile at me deliciously"
;)
great writing!

[Trisha Clark]

Oh... Karabelle. I'm starstruck.

[Richard McLin]

This is some very good writting. I'm only sorry I haven't read any of your work until now. I won't make the mistake of missing out on your work now. Great job.

[Billy Nogood]

damn good writing, very uplifting!

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Love the spanish theme. Your words are music in themselves. I'm not familiar with the poet you're speaking of here.. but I may look him up. If he causes such a response as this, he must good :)

Excellent piece!

[Disraeli Arito]

Adding this to my favorite list - I have read it about 5 times now

[Disraeli Arito]

Something about this was very sexy and teasing. Like your womans fingernails down your back when you'ce been locked up for 3 years.
Very subtle yet I see red when I read the words. I hear a voice also in the words

EXCELLENT piece of sensual melo-drama