spanish poetry

if i read you
pablo neruda
with faux spanish lilts
will you smile at me
deliciously

listen to the inflections
in my voice
until we fall asleep
in a blanket
of momentos silenciosos.

if i read you
spanish poetry
will you
adóreme.

remind me of kindness
with your warm
liquid eyes.
i barely comprehend
all the parts of you
i recognize.

if i sing you
pablo neruda
to the sounds of
your guitar
are we sharing music
or poetry
or perhaps
it is
eternity.

mira...
how your silent moments
awaken such sweet
sounds
in me.
 

Reviews

[Nihad Dweidary]

This evoca can easily melt the most intractable brick. This is surely worthy of another visit, Karabelle.

I am so delighted to have featured your work this week. I have no doubt that a plethora of authors are able to walk away with a wonderful sense of satisfaction when reading your poems. They are the brightest flowers in the garden, begging to be felt, smelt, and tenderly caressed. I love these lines:

i barely comprehend
all the parts of you
i recognize.

Love, -Nihad

[CarrieLynn {Chameleon A..]

The flow and word usage in this piece is electric! Wonderful Write! :)

[Cynthia Yildirim]

oh wow very nice :) I love the way it flows ever so sweetly :)

[Kitty]

I love this. I love that you used some Spanish words in between the write.
In the second Stanza, where you say " If I read you Spanish poetry will you ADOREME"
Did you mean Adore me? or Adorame in spanish? If so, If I may kindly suggest you take off WILL YOU and add "me adoraras"

But this is beautiful nonetheless. ;)

Excellent romantic write.

-Melba Chicoine

[Phil Sanders]

Delightfully written .....

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Lovely. Thanks for sharing. Debileah

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The poem evokes the vision of bleached white arched walls beneath red barrel roofs; the smell of ripe Valencia oranges; the sound of Villalobos played on a twelve-string; the taste of a dark, sweet, sangria; and the soft, gentle caress of a dark-haired, brown-eyed lover.

I listened to your performance after reading the piece. It enhanced the experience exponentially. "Spanish Poetry" was a thoroughly enjoyable moment. Thank you.

[QuillandInkWhispers]

Wow!!! This is a great poem. I also love Pablo Neruda. I liked how you used some spanish words within the poem. Neruda was amazing and I can't get enough of reading his poem "Tonight I can write the saddest lines" Great Job!!!

[Carrie Montgomery]

very impressive. This was warm ,tender, sensual.
"mira...
how your silent moments
awaken such sweet
sounds
in me. "
this was my fave stanza. Good work . FYI: James K. Blaylock recommended this poem . Glad he did.

[['tatiz speis]]

Wow. If I hadn't heard the way you wanted it spoken, I'm not sure how I would've read it. Listening to the words that way made them flow, while a sense of sensuality and tenderness washed over me. I'm really impressed with this poem.

[None]

Delicious and sweet. What a tender poem. This sends me off in another dimension to ponder this told love.