superficial scarring

she hides her pain
behind a mask of explosive
apathy.

"i don't f*****g care!" she screams
punching the wall
and bleeding from her knuckled heart.

her razor sharp tongue
cuts across her skin
and releases
some of her
screams.

the scars will remind her
how desperate life
can be.

"i don't f*****g care" she insists
throwing her glasses to the wall
and shattering the silences.

with a determined grimace
she twists the pieces of metal frame
'til they snap
and places the razor edge to her skin.

"i don't f*****g care" she shouts
above the voices that mock her.
the hands that reach out to her
are thrashed violently away.

so
i step aside and watch
pieces of her die.

Reviews

[Robert Luna]

WOW!!! Very deep. this made me feel as if maybe the speaker was almost like 2 people. Maybe like if one was the inter child and the speaker was not ready to let it go yet. Even though the inter child knew it had to leave and did so by taking its own life. Hmmmmm maybe I am just reading into it to deep as well.
Great job Loved it
Robert

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Whoa Kara.. I was in need of some powerful work so I went into your library today and low and behold not only did i find what I was in search for but damn this is so different for you but just as spectacular...

her razor sharp tongue
cuts across her skin
and releases
some of her
screams.

Those lines right there gave me a chill... sometimes we hurt ourselves by thinking thing are worse then they are and creating our own self destructive feelings... What a mind blowing poem... girl you so rock.

[Siennaskeleton]

This poem is soo beautiful...
A raw beauty that I don't see often in poems
Deffinatly an amazing write and good luck in the Mental Patient contest..you have a great chance

[RareRed]

I really like this. It's so raw and so real. It reminds me terribly of a friend that faced those emotions! Incredible write!

[Anhedonia 1349]

so
i step aside and watch
pieces of her die.

[Shannon Drake]

very strong. so much emotion. so depressing.. but yet.. thats what makes it so amazing. Love it.. and its just.. so real.

astounding.
really.

[Leah Simone]

This is very sad. Never fails when people interject "f*****g" between "don't" and "care"..it sort of erases the "don't" completely and amps up the volume significantly. What they really mean is "I F*****G CARE", but..."I won't let you help me". It is frustrating to see this happen especially if we are the ones saying it....even to ourselves.-Leah

[Carl Phillips]

Stunning emotive with just enough description to keep the reader guessing. I think this peice show one thing that anger doesn't just happen it is something that builds up and usually explodes in to the room to conceal many things. excellant piece

[Billy Nogood]

i dig the flow and the juxtaposed cutting verbiage. great subject matter as well. another great read.

[Disraeli Arito]

I am inspired by this piece
Thank you for sharing
You have a gift