hollow of my heart

The hollow of my heart
can only be filled
by the lilt in your smile / the tilt of your head
the way you tuck-tuck-tuck
tuck me
into bed.

I taste deprivation
-the salt on my lips-
supplications from my eyes
as they cry…
as I cry.

trailing down my cheeks and
into the curves
(you once kissed)
-my neck- and the rest of me
you’re gone and so’s the best of me.

I wish this was a jest to me
But I no longer laugh
(without concluding with a tear)

fear of the future
duels with delight

it was dark but then I saw you
- I was given sight -

I lay here wishing your arm was at my waist
I lace my words with rhythm and just a hint of rhyme
convincing myself that this happens all the time.

The pounding in my head reminds my heart how to beat.

I wait
and it’s late
and I hate how dreams remain so far …
I can see so clearly, but all I see are stars.

Reviews

[Christopher G. Starling]

the way you used your rhymes with all the different rhythms and beats was womderful. I did not even pay attention to the actual meaning of the words the first time, but instead felt the beat of the poem. I am very impressed. It went together beutifully.

[Laura]

I love how this flows. Truly beautiful. The last two stanzas are incredible. Great job!

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like the reptition you used here... good work.

[Mark]

Yeah, what that other guy said. :) This is excellent though, it really flows, you don't lose the feel or jumble it up at all.

"I wish this was a jest to me
But I no longer laugh
(without concluding with a tear) "

I love this line. It makes me want to laugh and cry. :) :(

[Yira Simone]

This was very good. I liked the wording and the way you carried to a smooth ending. Great flow, and imagery. I liked this.

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I love how you brought out the emotion in this poem. It can be felt from first to last line. The rhythm, flow and structure is excellent as well.. and the title fits it wonderfully. I enjoyed!

[Timothy R. Berman]

Only thing I can say is inspirational. I loved it.

[Alicia]

sorry, that was me

[april showers bring may..]

I found the lay out of this fascinating. I think I need to read it again...and again...

"The pounding in my head reminds my heart how to beat."

Brilliant...

[april showers bring may..]

I found the lay out of this fascinating. I think I need to read it again...and again...

"The pounding in my head reminds my heart how to beat."

Brilliant...