hollow of my heart

The hollow of my heart
can only be filled
by the lilt in your smile / the tilt of your head
the way you tuck-tuck-tuck
tuck me
into bed.

I taste deprivation
-the salt on my lips-
supplications from my eyes
as they cry…
as I cry.

trailing down my cheeks and
into the curves
(you once kissed)
-my neck- and the rest of me
you’re gone and so’s the best of me.

I wish this was a jest to me
But I no longer laugh
(without concluding with a tear)

fear of the future
duels with delight

it was dark but then I saw you
- I was given sight -

I lay here wishing your arm was at my waist
I lace my words with rhythm and just a hint of rhyme
convincing myself that this happens all the time.

The pounding in my head reminds my heart how to beat.

I wait
and it’s late
and I hate how dreams remain so far …
I can see so clearly, but all I see are stars.

Reviews

[The Guerrilla Warhol]

oi! "duels with delight"
im jealous of that line.
a hint of rhyme. just right.
and oh, the last stanza.
marvelous, dear.

[Kris Merrells]

*sigh*... so beautiful... Part of me needs to keep reading, but part of me wants to turn away, because it evokes such intense emotion...

[Julio]

This is true emotion.
I couldn't stop reading, from one line to the next.
Your words paint the most intrecate of portraits.

[Girl, Interrupted]

"The hollow of my heart
can only be filled
by the lilt in your smile / the tilt of your head
the way you tuck-tuck-tuck
tuck me
into bed."

I am ALL for repeating words for emphasis in poems like you did with 'tuck' (although I myself probably wouldn'tve put dashes). I think it puts more style and emotion into a poem. And that first stanza was... *kissing tips of fingers*

"you�re gone and so�s the best of me."

This is always what we feel when we have love goggles on. Sometimes it takes a really really long time to shake it.

"and I hate how dreams remain so far �
I can see so clearly, but all I see are stars."

^ and THAT line was just plain beauty.
bravo!

[Amber Victoria Tudor]

The structure is unique, indeed! I love how the lines follow the words. for example
"trailing down my cheeks and
into the curves
(you once kissed)
-my neck- and the rest of me
you�re gone and so�s the best of me."
The words trail down and curve just as you had written them. That is impressive.
The content, hits the spot that is for sure. I think I feel ya on this one.
Very cool.
Amber

[Roberto Luciano]

Damn...

Love your style. Structure is unique.

This is the first time, won't be the last....I promise.

[Toxic Tears]

wow!! I really enjoy reading your writings.. they are very well written!

[Rc R. Vagilidad]

misssssing someone...hah, i hate that feeling... i'm sure anyone should think something for an "ESCAPE", out of the blues.... or maybe sleep early tonight...and it's about 11:30 in the evening...i need to sleep!!! wahhh...i love this one!!

[Jesse Lynn]

wow wow wow

[Roy L. Pickering Jr.]

I loved the rhyme scheme of this poem. It was so playful, even though the subject matter was in a considerably less peppy mood. The contrast made for an interesting and enjoyable read, sort of like listening to percussion from a dixieland band playing behind the sorrowful lyrics of an oh so blues song.