hollow of my heart

The hollow of my heart
can only be filled
by the lilt in your smile / the tilt of your head
the way you tuck-tuck-tuck
tuck me
into bed.

I taste deprivation
-the salt on my lips-
supplications from my eyes
as they cry…
as I cry.

trailing down my cheeks and
into the curves
(you once kissed)
-my neck- and the rest of me
you’re gone and so’s the best of me.

I wish this was a jest to me
But I no longer laugh
(without concluding with a tear)

fear of the future
duels with delight

it was dark but then I saw you
- I was given sight -

I lay here wishing your arm was at my waist
I lace my words with rhythm and just a hint of rhyme
convincing myself that this happens all the time.

The pounding in my head reminds my heart how to beat.

I wait
and it’s late
and I hate how dreams remain so far …
I can see so clearly, but all I see are stars.

Reviews

[Felicia Aguilar]

This was beautiful, at times playful but it's also laced with a sadness. This was my favorite line:

The pounding in my head reminds my heart how to beat

[James]

a beautifully written poem.. i enjoyed the entire structure.. great read

[Barry S. Maltese]

beautiful poem. I like how you phrase some of your words. Great job.

[Ryan Merritt]

Yes. You took some time with this one. So it's love lost. I know alot about that, and wish I did'nt.
I admire the flow in this piece, and the use of rhyme when called upon.
Nice.

[Sarah Williams]

What a beautiful piece! The wordplay in this poem was nothing short of amazing. It's obvious that you've taken time and effort into creating such a treat for the senses with this one, and it shows. You're quite the poet, my dear!

[Gandré]

Kara, you are not only beautiful, you write also beautifuly! A marvelous poem.....Each small moment is a precious miracle - when seen through the eyes of love ! thank you for this! lara

[Paul Grimsley]

this was great -- there was a wonderful musicality to the way it scanned, a lilting rhythm to it. you had some wonderful turns of phrase as well. there was one tiny part that didn't feel right which was 'it was dark but then I saw you
- I was given sight - '
i don't know, for some reason that didn't work for me and it was the only part of the poem that didn't. amidst a poem sparkling with wonderful imagery and fluidity this seemed slightly clunky. i only say this because i love the rest of the poem so much.

[M. Quesnel]

All of this is so lovely and evocative. My favorite stanza is the second one. Also, you handle rhyme really well - it never seems contrived.

[Joshua Orion Moore Rose..]

"I can see so clearly, but all I see are stars."

So, your pain or mine?

It's marvelous. Just like everything I read of yours. I love the way your words come across in different voices that are all your own.

Also, I must say I'm glad to see I'm not the only one dining on ashes and writing about it. Just so long as we're still hungry, yes?

[Christina Maria]

Anyone could be lying on their back staring upwards at the dark sky and hear these words effortlessly in their minds. This was poignant, very heartfelt. I was really enamored of the sad wistful layers in this poem.

Cree