sunshine

I believed you
when you called me
sunshine.

 

 

When you held me – I believed.

 

In life and freedom and madness…

 

 

madness of the soul and of the mind

and all the other
kinds of crazy.

 

 

I am crazy to love you.

 

 

[almost as crazy as I am to hold you in this way ]

 

against me.

 

 

I think I want to fall
(fall deep within you)

 

 

It is true…
I am even falling now.
(too much light can make you blind)

 

 

I believed you
when you called me
sunshine.

 

 

so why…

 

 

why am I crying
in the darkness

you left behind?

Reviews

[Mariah]

oh my goodness kara,
this is beautiful.
i love it.
& i'm glad i met someone who aches the same way i do,
but i wish we didn't at all.
wonderful poem.

[Doug Case]

I don't know, Kara, I don't know what to say. The opening and closing stanzas are amazing (as always), but I kinda fell off in the middle. I'm not sure why, either - I think it had something to do with the random "against me" and the odd "too much light can make you blind." I don't know, they just didn't seem to fit and now I don't know what they were supposed to say. I wish I could ellaborate better! Because, besides those lines, it really was amazing.

Four Stars

[Madeline Moore]

I love this poem Kara! Now the challenge is do we forgive them, or do we continue in the "darkness" in which we were left? Reach for the light!

[H. A. M.]

Ouch! Love hurts I suppose. I should have seen it coming when she said 'I believed you
when you called me sunshine.' I didn't see it coming like she didn't. If he stayed around in the worst of times and then left her (death,no more feeling for her,some one else?) crying in the darkness he left behind,it makes me wonder why did her leave. I did feel her all the way thru this one and I feel for her. Now DAT'S A POEM! A very good read indeed!

[Ed Rector]

wow great job on expressing some emotion of hurt through out the poem. i enjoyed the twist at the end which turend from bright to dark... and think of this... at least you got a poem out of the incadent.

[Gandré]

Because the "it" has a conflict with the Inner Self and the Over Me (dont know english terminology..) is trying to settle it means: to unify all 3 - and then...you are balanced again as usual and you wuoldn 't want him?

This is so true..and beautiful, too: "madness of the soul and of the mind
and all the other
kinds of crazy.

I am crazy to love you."

it is good to end this with such a question, you couldn't have say it better.

[Mary Brown]

I have not the words to say how I like this piece...

[Mark]

Awesome ending. Awesome picture for this poem.

[Sisi]

Wow! Powerful poem especially the ending.... It takes you through the emotions from the bright beginning to the dark ending. Thank you for sharing.