call me

call me

so i can hear your voice
and tell you
how much you disgust me
how you broke me
how i will never breathe for you
again.

call me

so i can hear your voice
and remember
all the times you killed me
with your latent apathy
and your insatiable cruelty
towards me.

call me

so i can hear your voice
and remind you
of the devastation you left behind you
and the way my disgust for you grew
and all the other things
that devastation brings.

oh
just
call me

so i can hear your voice.

Reviews

[Crystal]

I would have to agree with Ted... the ending surprised me. I was feeling what you were wanting to tell him, as I've been there (who hasn't), and then the last of it broke my heart a little. That voice was the death of me too many times. This is wonderfully worded and genuine. Nice!

[Daphney Beltramo]

blunt and true. it doesn't even matter that you speak to each other just as long as you hear their voice. so pretty

[Amanda]

Funny how it always comes down to just hearing their voice.

[Candid Writer]

I like this piece. This is real poetry.

"so i can hear your voice
and remember
all the times you killed me
with your latent apathy
and your insatiable cruelty
towards me."

This stanza is very descriptive and heartwrenching. I like how you plead to this man to call you, because you have so many emotions that you would love to express to him.

At first glance, one would expect that you wanted this person to call, so you could express how much you love them. So, that made it all the more intriguing. The twist was golden.

[Eshe' Allen]

very realistic. that love-hate thing is a b***h. nicely done.

[Marc Mccune]

I like this one.
the gentle rage
the regret
the quiet retribution
and persistent longing.

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[Ted]

Well. I liked the beginning. Sounded like you were telling the fella what he deserved to hear, but then you surprised me at the end. Still, I liked it all. Only, I wanted ol' boy to feel like s**t all the way through.