into your unknown

i know you
much less
than the empathic earth
and much more than moments
of goodbye.

 

 

i tie myself to your voice
and respond with a visceral leaping
to your scent.

yet your moments are lent to me
like the water as it laughs /
as it laps
upon the shore.

 

 

i know you
as the pelican knows the sea
(possible to skim you but not to swim you)
to taste you / then lose you
from whence you came.

Reviews

[[im]practically Me]

this to me is a piece that speaks of great loss...
now i know that poetry and all art for that matter is completely relative at times and that interpretations are drawn upon as a result of the background of the veiwer...
i say that because i read this from the point of veiw of a girl who was in love with a boy who killed himself...
because of that experience this piece reaches into the loss that i knew (though i have move on significantly since then)


i know you
much less
than the empathic earth
and much more than moments
of goodbye.

this is a stunning way to begin a piece...
more than moments of goodbye...
i dont know about you but it seems my life is full of those moments so to know this person more than those moments... thats knowing... right?

i tie myself to your voice
and respond with a visceral leaping
to your scent.
yet your moments are lent to me
like the water as it laughs
as it laps
upon the shore.

and i hate these moments...
these moments that as you say so perfectly well are only lent to us...
the one where you see someone who looks just like him and you almost run up to the person and then remember...
the one where you hear his laugh and want to bash the crap out of whoever it was who laughed that way...
yeah... i know those moments and i hate them... with the fire of a thousand suns lol

yeah... this is a very beautiful piece right here...

[Pierce Franklin]

"i know you
as the pelican knows the sea
possible to skim you but not to swim you
to taste you then lose you
from whence you came."

Brilliant...

[Aaron]

I like it!

[Tylernol]

That was...wow.

It makes my heart ache.

I could read those last 5 lines over and over again...

[Candid Writer]

This poem ends sadly but the sadness in understandable. Saying goodbye to someone you care about is never easy. It rips the heart in places unimaginable. I also love how the piece started -

"i know you
much less
than the empathic earth
and much more than moments
of goodbye."

Very nice piece of work here.

[Ragdoll]

simply beautiful this is... i tried to pick a favorite line or two, but the entire poem is gorgeous.. that's it!

peace,
~Cat

[Mandi L. Vaughan: The S..]

Definately a fan!

[Rc R. Vagilidad]

�i tie myself to your voice
and respond with a visceral leaping�- force by the power of love, perhaps? It�s very nice to hear a voice of your love, demanding�and you still keep on doing what should be done�.GREAT!

�i know you
as the pelican knows the sea�- it seems you know everything from him but only the outside part; you cannot swim under his thoughts or even know what he really feels for you.

But in the end, everything goes back from where it should be�leaving you, to goodbyes�

PS-just an interpretation! This is great, though!

[Marc Mccune]

So true...the delight of the moment
the love for now.
this one...hits home

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[Gar Avoch]

Sad but accepting, nice spontaneity
Thanks
Gar

[Ted]

I am at a loss for words.