my final plea

i asked a boy
today
to be a man.

who has the right
to such a request?

i know it were best if i slip away,
and allow the boy to be.
but me? I need the man inside
to love
to love
to love me.

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh this is so cool... you knowing the potential in the person and hope to bring it out in them... you say so much my dear with so few words.

[DarkAngelWriter]

Dude. I love this. So true :)

[Mariah]

holyyyy ****
i needed this SO badly right now. !
sometimes no matter what, you can be a wo/man on the outside,
and still be a little boy/girl inside.
so true. !
thank you.

[Not Afraid of Bruises]

5th line - do you mean "to ask such a request" ?


A great poem, very short very sweet and to the point. just check your phrasing and grammar. If your read the poem out loud you'll catch the little snags. best of luck - this was a great read

[Kasia A. Tilander]

There is so much emotion packed into these few words, almost feels like a shot in the gut.

[Pierce Franklin]

Short and sweet - fantastic.

[Science Fiction: A Genr..]

i had the same problem with a girl once
i thought loving the woman she would become made up for the little girl she was.

[Aaron]

Yeah... If this boy is over the age of 18... he better start being a man and you should expect nothing less... Anyway, I liked it.

[L. L. Jacobson]

........i needed this right now. And still do.

[Elizabeth]

Love it!