Translucence

Translucence


I feel it most
on empty summer nights
when I am filled to over-flowing
with a sense
of peace.

There is nothing more to these nights.
there is no heat / no cold
only a startling stilness
that settles over me
like a translucent blanket
(throwing everything into
unexpected clarity)

there is no cold / no heat
only my heart beat
as it pressed inside me

My eyes will close
(whether I will them to or not)
they will close because
the stillness is
so heavy

and yet light enough
to give me the feeling
that

I am about to fly.

My feet are firmly pressed
against blades of fresh-smelling
dew-covered
grass

yet I recognize that the sky
is so much closer
to me
now.

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I could simply say a beautiful poem but with your work i can't, your expression of the human condition is so extremely amazing... this has the feeling of someone who worries about future love based upon painful memories of the past and these line

My feet are firmly pressed
against blades of fresh-smelling
dew-covered
grass

yet I recognize that the sky
is so much closer
to me
now.

wow what a way to say that all though you are keeping a cautious outlook you are willing to give love a chance to do you right.

I LOVE THIS but then again when don't I, if you ever put out a book of poetry I am first in line.

[Sarah Williams]

A truley beautiful piece! The first stanza was about as perfect as anything could be...really set the stage nicely for the rest of the piece.

[Juliette Cross]

this poem took me back and forth, i didn't know what the feeling was that was trying to be expressed. it felt like a deep sorrow and then i felt like i was shot up to the highest point... and i loved it.

[Benjamin L. Weekly]

Ah... Breathe in the dew laden air. My eyes closed of their own volition as I read your lines, drinking in the aura of peace you create.

One of the most striking things about this poem is your use of brackets and cold / heat. I've never seen this before but it came across masterfully and I love it.

Your use of emphasis through repetition is also appealing. Great job, favorite here.

[Jim Morse]

Clever use of the language. Very nice, Emily :D

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[Leah Simone]

Serenity has spoken through your pen and I too feel lulled in the thoughts of this peaceful tranquility. This is a superb poem...very nice, Kara -Leah

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There is nothing more to these nights.
there is no heat / no cold
only a startling stillness
that settles over me
like a translucent blanket.

very nice emily...

[Shane Rendon]

This totally took pulled me in, even while reading this, its like nothing was going on around me. This piece is absolutly beautiful. Ah to fly... I tattooed a flock of birds on my side to illastrate that feeling. This was amazing.
-Shane

[Aaron]

While reading this, my mind brought me to Western Oregon... I was there with my father in September. We found a meadow high upon a ridge and we just sat there... smells and images just raced through my mind when I read this and I felt like I could relate.

[Pierce Franklin]

You have a talent for creating powerful images with the simplest touch, that everyone can relate to but nobody can put into words:

"There is nothing more to these nights.
there is no heat / no cold
only a startling stilness
that settles over me
like a translucent blanket
(throwing everything into
unexpected clarity)"

You are incredibly talented.

[Ted]

You know you have a fan, right? I love your ability to vividly describe what I could not, and in ways I would never imagine. Yet, when I read it I suddenly understand.