your silence

you are so quiet
[with me]

 

and sometimes I just want to make you
scream
[make you sigh]
I can’t figure out why
you are this way
with me

 

-suspended-breathless—

 

in a moment of anticipation
[heady anticipation]
where irrevocably nothing happens

 

(and then you are gone)
and I am alone
with salty wishful regrets
falling
from
my
eyes

 

and it is then
that I realize

 

how very loud
your silence
can be.

Reviews

[Angel's Lady]

oh my...how very beautiful and how very touching! Great job! Excellent write! Please tell me, no matter where you are, you will continue to write and post in here! Because, Scarecrow, I will miss THIS you most of all....Much love always.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Actions do speak louder then words or lack of actions... your words speak volumes with your unmistakable style and talent. I am never deaf to your words for you always speak with genuine heart.

[Maria Retz]

and it is then
that I realize

how very loud
your silence
can be.

I loved this endning.

The poem is very well written and beautiful. Thank you for sharing

[I.R.]

Love your use of structure. The use of parenthesis really does add the whispering effect, which fits perfectly with the title. My favorite stanza is
(and then you are gone)
and I am alone
with salty wishful regrets
falling
from
my
eyes ...The way that 'falling from my eyes" lines up really does convey the movement of falling. The tone of the poem is very intimate and though I always nag when I see a lot of abstracts, they work here beautifully and efficiently. Beautiful work.

[Rc R. Vagilidad]

the last stanza gave me a whole of wondering!

"how very loud
your silence
can be."- so, perhaps you cried out loud in here?

wonderful depthness in the poem, and eloquent write on the subject! well described!

[Why Stay?]

'with salty, wishful regrets
falling
from
my
eyes'

how very poignant and dual-sided...
excellent work here, aye...
the parenthesized sections add exactly the intended amount of emotional height to this piece.
one slight thing, very picky of me, i know...
cannot is one word.
just a simple spacing error.
the rest is *kisses fingers* magnifique!
~ami~

[Miss Spiritual Tramp Of..]

i like the flow of this very much!

[Marc Mccune]

I've been accused of this.

this is very well and cleverly written.

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[Ted]

"and I am alone
with salty wishful regrets
falling
from
my
eyes"

That is so......I love it. I can't describe it.
That line is beautiful.

"how very loud
your silence
can be."

Is that not the truth?