place of worship

 

    teach me not to
    tremble

    when you touch me.

    i am deeply delicate
    as you deftly
    delve
    within me.

    i wear my
    surrender
    like a pin on my lapel.

    Where shall we begin?

    with your lips upon my skin
    or the slow sweet
    sin
    that is
    this…

    you tease me with
    tenderness.

    my eyelashes
    caress your neck
    [i bespeckle you with
    delirious drum beats]

    I am quiet

    lest I speak
    and shatter the silence
    of our prayers…

    my supplications
    slip past my lips
    and into the
    curves of your mouth.

    this…
    this is what faith is all about.

Reviews

[Tara Jean Olson]

i love it! however, i don't understand 'this is what faith is all about'
you are relating physiocal intimacy with faith,
and yes, i can totally understand that part, however in the poem you do not suggest this in any way.
heck, emily, you could make an entirely new, and explicit element to this poem, and do just that.
but only do as youu wish, darlin. you are an artist of words, and your keyboard is the blank canvas:)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The act of intimacy is a true leap of faith cause that is where a relationships tend to get more complicated and yet more beautiful... your writing is filled with such desire and sensuality. I think my heart skipped a couple beats just reading this.

[Ralphy]

The saying is...can you feel it and that I can. The harmony reasonates with the place to worship but I realize it was the Indulgence as you sampled the vapor and steam. Hmmm, I have to wondered what is hidden from your talent...Btw I was about to look for the disclaimer...thanks for the pleasent read.

[~Haute*Cocoa~]

this is BEAUTIFUL- it provides a lovely, aching image of desire.

[Gandré]

It provided me with suprising insights ...about myself, though

"my eyelashes
caress your neck
[i bespeckle you with
delirious drum beats] " ======>>>>>>>divine!

it is a wonderful poem, once again, my dear Kara! such a cute impressionistic treasure.

[~crazy Beautiful~]

wow
my fav part was
" my eyelashes
caress your neck
[i bespeckle you with
delirious drum beats] "
Bespeckle, i love the word
your choice of metaphores and way of going about your writing is quite exceptional
a very good read
:)

[Steven Szepietowski]

Sultry, flowing, and very descriptive. You really crafted something swell here, just the little snippets and the way you say them is just so sheik. The recording is priceless, as others have said, your voice and inflection make it a totally different piece. This earlier writing to conjures up an style and image of curiosity and youth, that you write with such a freshness that I seem to be too jaded to connect to at times. Like viewing the ocean from your window through neutral colored curtains.

[Particles Of Spirit]

Your voice make this piece even better. I really like the sounds and your use of alliteration.



"with your lips upon my skin
or the slow sweet
sin
that is
this�

you tease me with
tenderness."

You tease me with words.

[E1izab3th]

thanks for the review!


and i agree with bernadette--your voice is crucial to this piece. I liked this so much I'm listening to it again.

great job--I can't wait to hear more!

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Your voice is what makes this poem come alive. Anyone can read it, but the way you play with the words really makes it come to life.

I really liked this one. Now for more...