playing dollhouse

she loves him
like a child
loves a
dilapidated
doll.

wants to hug off
all his buttons
and smooth away
his seams.
to wash him
with her hands
and dry him
with her breath.

she wants to love him
and love him
'til there's
nothing
left.

she wants
to dress him
when he's dry.
hold him
while she
cries.
grow old
with him laying
by her
side.

she loves him
like a child.
with innocence
and grace.
from a deep,
deep,
beautiful
place.

she loves him
like a child.
which makes her
young and
naive.

for she was
unaware
that dolls
could
just
leave.

 

 

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh my Kara you never cease to amaze me... quite the twist with this one too which made me have to re-read it and now even more powerful, the innocents of first love is the greatest as you go in feeling total free of borders built by scars of betrayal... once again no one can describe it quite like you, that was a brilliant analogy of the situation. BRAVO my sparkling diamond!!

[Leah Simone]

AWWW man..the ending was KILLER! I pictured Velveteen Rabbit, but the ending...whew! Heartstrings....PLUCKED ...thud _Leah

[Mark]

This is really one of your best poems. The last stanza and its abrupt change really conveys the feeling they leave behind when they just snap out of our lives. Excellent poem Karabella, superb ending.

[V]

you're good...I'll give you that. Welcome to the site...
V

[Alicia]

i
love
it
.

[Brooks Addison]

I just read this, and all I can say is....Wow! I am very moved by this piece.

[Teresa Gunn]

This isn't so much innocence lost as innocence ripped away. Sadly, we all have to go through it... which is what keeps poets in material.

[Brandon T. Bisceglia]

I like the description, the flow, the concept... there was just one bit i wouldn't have -

"she loves him
like a child.
which makes her
young and
naive."

everything else in the poem before this shows us this. there doesn't seem to be a need to state it outright when the rest of the poem has already projected it more forcefully than the mere explanation could ever do.

i do love it, though. :)

[[untitled]]

awww the ending really just made my lips purse. This poem is so rich with feeling and I am a big fan of using the child to see into the adult. I love the metaphor of the doll and the sparse and spaced lines. Great one Kara. I will come back for more!

[Nikki]

ohhh, what an innocence lost kinda piece.

i really liked this...great imagery!

-Nikki

[You Don't Know Me]

omg, this was so beautiful. I really loved this.