playing dollhouse

she loves him
like a child
loves a
dilapidated
doll.

wants to hug off
all his buttons
and smooth away
his seams.
to wash him
with her hands
and dry him
with her breath.

she wants to love him
and love him
'til there's
nothing
left.

she wants
to dress him
when he's dry.
hold him
while she
cries.
grow old
with him laying
by her
side.

she loves him
like a child.
with innocence
and grace.
from a deep,
deep,
beautiful
place.

she loves him
like a child.
which makes her
young and
naive.

for she was
unaware
that dolls
could
just
leave.

 

 

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh my Kara you never cease to amaze me... quite the twist with this one too which made me have to re-read it and now even more powerful, the innocents of first love is the greatest as you go in feeling total free of borders built by scars of betrayal... once again no one can describe it quite like you, that was a brilliant analogy of the situation. BRAVO my sparkling diamond!!

[Tiffany Pochatko]

Aww. If only we could find a way to make all dolls stay. This was great. I loved it. Simple but so wonderful. Beautiful.

[Sarabeara!]

Rhyme scheme was great...everything fit in really well.
Good, yet depressing, ending but good show of emotion. The description of the doll is really great...it makes her lover seem as lifeless as a rag doll which she only uses for security and comfort...not so much a love because of personality or looks, yet the tender, pure love of a child. The only thing I noticed was "laying," which I think should be "lying" because "to lie" means to rest and "to lay" means to place which also needs a direct object. Keep it or leave it, it's not a huge thing. But it was a well-written poem. I thoroughly enjoyed this.

[Richard K]

First loves are always like this, aren't they? Even the writing gives this childlike appearance which captivates the mood so much more. A sad story, but with a surprise end...the little girl grew to be an amazingly independant woman. One she may have not become if she were to rely on such a raggedy doll. ;)

Excellent, m'dear.

[~crazy Beautiful~]

I love how you used a childlike innocence to convey a love story, how sad the ending is, doll's sometime's do leave.
Beautiful writing

[Steven Szepietowski]

the end of the road is usually where I start these things. There is the obvious aire of innosence. But there is something else too, the relationship between the speaker and her man, what seems like a clear age difference too. Which for me begs the question who is he and what is he ike. He must be quite a guy for the speaker to say such things, but the poem overall reads more immature than it does innocent. It's not a bad thing though, I mean the structure and the words are all very sound. I guess it's just what my old composition teacher would call "colloquial".

[Kristen R. Heyl]

Love how you take on a child's innocent perspective on love and how you convey the naitivity of them when it comes to love but apply it to an adult. Bravo *clapping*

[Hedra Helix]

Aww thats so smart and beautiful:) I love it. Weve all loved the buttons off of someone.

[Rachell R. Taylor]

There's an innocence to this poem, that is absolutely beautiful. Bravo.

[J. Thomas Parker]

the last stanza is a killer.

i love this piece.

favorite.

[Gordon Greene]

You are very, very good at this.
It's not enough that you paint such a beautiful picture, you end them with subdued statements that leave a big fat "!!!".
Thank you for writing this one.
Another favorite.
g.g.