wild & broken

Now includes an evoca: http://soundcloud.com/kara-krantz/wild-broken

You seem to have misplaced my memory.

Absently tucking me between layers of moss,
you watch as the moisture saturates me.
I am a sponge, soaking up your sighs, pregnant with your always-temporary presence.

You misplace your intentions. One moment fully pulsating with possibility,
the next sobbing upon my lap. Hands reaching over, pulling my hair, grasping the seat-belt
as tears fall upon my dress.

Who are you, my wild broken boy? I curl my fingers through your hair
and feel nothing. You have taken all I had to give. 
You have emptied me. I have been ravaged.
I am broken by your promises and numb to your eyes, shining with dew.

Why do you stare, so guileless and strong, and promise me the world?
You are as transient as the salty sea; I taste you on my lips
but you are soon washed away with the softest of kisses, an absent-minded touch. You are gone.

You seem to have misplaced me.

Traveling deep into the wilderness,
I can no longer seek you.
I can no longer wait for you.

You have misplaced all these memories, broken all the beauty.
You have ravaged my heart.

I seek you in the quiet moments, but my wild broken boy
you are gone. 

 

Reviews

[Philip Muls]

The poem sounds authentic, based upon real happenings...?

Broken boy...is that someone who you helped ? It makes me sad...as if that person stood on your shoulders and then flew off...I can no longer wait for you, sounds disillusioned...

Well done!

I'd appreciate it if you could read mine. Take care.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I enjoyed the read. I generally think of the "salty sea" as a permanent fixture and not transient at all. Although it does move and evaporate and reform...but I got the feeling of a "temporary" meaning in this usage. Perhaps a metaphor for tears? Your writing style is lovely and interesting as always. It never fails to make me think and consider different usages.

[Henry]

Your reading is amazing! I didn't even bother to read it first, I just heard you and this was meant to be read out loud. There is so much experience in these words, and I don't mean life experience, but written experience. A real pleasure! It was like sitting at an open reading from my dimly lit study room.
Held my breath until the end.

- Henry

[Kara Emily Krantz]

Wow, Henry!! Thank you!!! :) That means a whole lot, and I am so glad you feel that way. I haven't done any readings or open mics in a long time... and perhaps I should. :)

[MAC]

you have always written amazingly, this piece goes beyond that. your broken pieces are beautiful place together in this piece that just rips through me. you are and always will be an amazing and beautiful soul.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

Mark Cotterman; amazing to hear this from you. Your words bring a smile to my face. :)

[MAC]

seeing your words and face again brings joy to my heart. :)

[The 13th Eros]

Haunting shadows of recollection; how you provoke memories and emotion that becomes as one with the reader. Your words are sorrowful enchantments.

[fireblossom]

And....she's back! :-)

This is a powerful poem. It exposes so much of a relationships end. This should be taught to young dreaming girls before they give in to the suspension of reality.

I love your writing. It is graphic "One moment fully pulsating with possibility,
the next sobbing upon my lap. Hands reaching over, pulling my hair, grasping the seat-belt as you sob against my dress" and achingly intimate, "I seek you in the quiet moments, but my wild broken boy you are gone"

Thank you for reminding me about you. Years ago you were the reason I came and stayed at this website.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

Oh my goodness for some reason I just read this. And it totally just made my night.

[Acer]

Amazing piece.

[Sami Khalil]

Traveling deep into the wilderness,
I can no longer seek you.
I can no longer wait for you.
A nice write...:)

[Max Teal]

Maybe over seasoned. But, "I am a sponge, soaking up your sighs" is quite nice.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

WOW, you have not lost your touch... dramatically intense work... when a loved one lets us down forgiveness is a part of life but when it becomes a habit you got to let go before it drowns you emotionally.

[Clockwork]

The recording honestly gave me chills. When you read, you bring your whole heart into the poem and that is palpable. The poem lives beyond the page and in between the lines. I liked the buildup in this piece to the simile about how he is " as transient as the salty sea;"

You have so much soul. Your images are organic and they touch the true nature of emotions and events.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

Wow... what a flattering review... thank you so much! You make me want to do more pieces with the evoca companion. :)

[Clockwork]

You're welcome. I think you should go for it :-)