wild & broken

Now includes an evoca: http://soundcloud.com/kara-krantz/wild-broken

You seem to have misplaced my memory.

Absently tucking me between layers of moss,
you watch as the moisture saturates me.
I am a sponge, soaking up your sighs, pregnant with your always-temporary presence.

You misplace your intentions. One moment fully pulsating with possibility,
the next sobbing upon my lap. Hands reaching over, pulling my hair, grasping the seat-belt
as tears fall upon my dress.

Who are you, my wild broken boy? I curl my fingers through your hair
and feel nothing. You have taken all I had to give. 
You have emptied me. I have been ravaged.
I am broken by your promises and numb to your eyes, shining with dew.

Why do you stare, so guileless and strong, and promise me the world?
You are as transient as the salty sea; I taste you on my lips
but you are soon washed away with the softest of kisses, an absent-minded touch. You are gone.

You seem to have misplaced me.

Traveling deep into the wilderness,
I can no longer seek you.
I can no longer wait for you.

You have misplaced all these memories, broken all the beauty.
You have ravaged my heart.

I seek you in the quiet moments, but my wild broken boy
you are gone. 

 

Reviews

[Philip Muls]

The poem sounds authentic, based upon real happenings...?

Broken boy...is that someone who you helped ? It makes me sad...as if that person stood on your shoulders and then flew off...I can no longer wait for you, sounds disillusioned...

Well done!

I'd appreciate it if you could read mine. Take care.

[Melbourne Bound]

Gone, but not forgotten...that's what we all wish for really, just not this harshly, I suppose. Wild boy indeed. Next!

[Relic]

Very well done and with skill. Great job here.

[emmajoy]

What an extraordinary poem: tis raw yet passionate, melancholic yet longing, and, your phrasing is just.. wonderful, '.. 'You have misplaced all these memories, broken all the beauty. - You have ravaged my heart. '

[Kara Emily Krantz]

Thank you, Emma!!!! Wonderful words, I appreciate that so much.

[emmajoy]

My pleasure. Beautiful words

[Adam Adams]

"You have emptied me. I have been ravaged." Your stuff has got much worth to be admired .. in all senses. I believe, you here talking here of love-lost or some mishappenings ..that stole your everything; shattered your spirits in pieces; left your broken ... with the same phase as your lover seemed to be quite broken ... very nice shot. I guess, the poetry's written in someone's memories .. with an every drop of tear very well. Great job!

[Mayank]

Whoa! this is beautiful piece. My mind hanging from one word to another, then one line to another, slipping through those verses... you words truly misplaced my thoughts.

[A. Amos]

I can no longer seek you.
I can no longer wait for you.

Romance on peak of it and you penned very well

[J. Alfred Prufrock]

I enjoyed this very much. The sentiment shines through as always in your work. I did have one questioned that puzzled me at first glance...though I may have misunderstood your meaning. "You are as transient as the salty sea;" Are you being sarcastic here? or ironic? The voice sounds very sincere but the content seems ironic. Seas amd oceans are usually used as images of an eternal or an enduring force; and are seen as everlasting and strong and powerful. So.. not sure if that works in (what seems to be) your intended use as a metaphor ofr something transient or fleeting.

Other than the unclear meaning there, this poem was wonderful, very real and honest. I could not help but wonder if it was about you, and if so how things worked out. Are you okay? moved on? still peotically lamenting, shouting at the heavenst? I admire the honesty in your writing; that is something that is missing in the vast majority of the poetry on this site.

well done, by friend
prufrock

[FateDictates]

beautiful and haunting, strong words and scar tissue..loved it

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I enjoyed the read. I generally think of the "salty sea" as a permanent fixture and not transient at all. Although it does move and evaporate and reform...but I got the feeling of a "temporary" meaning in this usage. Perhaps a metaphor for tears? Your writing style is lovely and interesting as always. It never fails to make me think and consider different usages.