To a Little Girl

advice for one so lost.

 

"Keep your feet planted,"

He says,

"even when they feel like uprooting themselves

Keep your shoulders back-

But relaxed,

Keep your head up

Don't stare at your feet.

Feel the wind blow

But don't fall over

Keep your balance.

 

"When I say 'when times get hard'

You will take it lightly;

 As lightly as a feather

That's been traveling the skies

For as long as you've been alive

But as soon as times get hard

Everything seems impossible

Like a purple elephant

Like a green sky…

Like broken promises…

 

"Try not to quiver at a tornado,"

He says,

"You don't need to, you can handle it

You are a rock

You are a stone…

You are a tree…

 

"And now I'll say it:

When times get hard,

Peel off the skin of misery

And leave it behind...

Your roots are planted…

You don't need nothin'"

 

Author's Note

i need advice on how to improve it!! feel free to remark on it!

Reviews

[Cho-kun]

I like this! It's cute. ^^

I have two critiques for you. One, I noticed there were a few times when this person was compared to a tree, but it was really subtle and it took a while for me to notice it. Maybe you could do more with that? And two, one of the italic lines, "Like broken promises..."- it didn't seem to fit. Could you explain it more? Like, what promise was broken? When? It seems a little random.

Everything else was really adorable.

[Laura E. Aranda]

There is no improving! This was so cool. Don't all girls wish they could have had this advice somewhere along in their lifetime? Cheers, lea