Brain Dead

Brain Dead

A Poem by Sapphire Balasquez
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Starts out a little cheesy and terrible, sorry, but it gets morbid. =D

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Brushing my cheek softly,
Caressing every fiber of my being
With your sweet whispers
Holding my hand in yours,
Encompassing it
With a layer of truth and hope.
I don't care for this.
 
Sealing my lips with a slow kiss
Covering my fears with your arms
Looking into my eyes as I look into yours
I realize that this all means nothing.
 
Crying into their shoulders,
Holding them as tight as I can,
Linking arms and skipping around parks,
Being told "it's going to be okay"
It's going to be okay…
 
Because I believe that it's not going to be,
Because I can't see past my own fingers
Where my home stares back at me
And tears pour down my face.
All I can manage to do
Is clutch someone to me,
Cry on their shoulder,
I don't need a lover.
 
I need a blanket thrown over my head
I need a hug.
I need my friends.
But when the words spill from their mouths
Their words of comfort
Stab my heart like some sort of massive butcher knife
That couldn't make more of a mess if it tried.
 
And in my head,
That blood trickles all down my front as my eyes glaze over
I'm numb
My tears mix with the blood and no one can reach me now
I'm in a different place
My head can't take this
My heart can't take this
But still, I have learned
To love my friends, more than I could ever love a lover
 
But then… I suppose that's why.
Why the blood drips from me
Why I stand so helplessly
So hopelessly
Staring at anything and everything
That I can't have
And can never have
My roots are weary.

© 2008 Sapphire Balasquez


Author's Note

Sapphire Balasquez
please help me revise, what do you think of it? >< I wrote it on spur of the moment, so just throw the suggestions at me! =P

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*hug*

Oh wow. Now you've made me cry. I'm so sorry! T^T

It was really beautiful. It's so real, so there's a lot of passion in it. I have a personal grudge against the phrase "Every fiber of my being" so I didn't like that one, but it was probably fine where it is.
The only part I'd recommend a major change to is the last line. It doesn't quite tie up the poem, it seems to start a new idea. If you tied back in love somehow to the very last line it might feel more complete.
So beautiful though.

"Just slip me on I'll be your blanket
Wherever-whatever-I'll be your coat "


Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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*hug*

Oh wow. Now you've made me cry. I'm so sorry! T^T

It was really beautiful. It's so real, so there's a lot of passion in it. I have a personal grudge against the phrase "Every fiber of my being" so I didn't like that one, but it was probably fine where it is.
The only part I'd recommend a major change to is the last line. It doesn't quite tie up the poem, it seems to start a new idea. If you tied back in love somehow to the very last line it might feel more complete.
So beautiful though.

"Just slip me on I'll be your blanket
Wherever-whatever-I'll be your coat "


Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Sapphire Balasquez
Sapphire Balasquez

Niwot, CO



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