That little stretch

Everyone has a personal hell, this is about mine

 

Like a cigarette that burns and smokes

Not only itself but the smoker

And a few innocents if he’s careless enough

It burns me from the inside

Slowly but surely.

Some times pushing, some times depressing

To see that how

I’ve let the proverbial sins take over.

Everything comes at a price,

Nothing is free.

Imagine a personal hell

Far different from what you’re told about.

The pain not physical

Yet almost unbearable.

Some say it’s because I’ve fallen

While others say that

I chose to be where I am

While the rest of the world rose.

Imagine a thousand seeds,

All throbbing inside you

And then bursting together

Taking you wave by wave.

I hope that this is the last one,

And one seed finds the audacity to stay

Ands start all over again.

I bow down, fold my hands and pray,

Hope that I find the strength,

That this is the last stretch

And I don’t end up starting all over again.

It’s my personal hell,

I am praying for deliverance

And hope that this little stretch

Finally comes to an end. 

Reviews

[Candle in the wind]

It's my personal hell,

I am praying for deliverance

And hope that this little stretch

Finally comes to an end.

How true! We are all praying for deliverance.But by making it stretch to be traversed you at least make it transient so there is a ray of hope beyond the clouds of pain.

[An Ordinary Woman]

And I don't end up starting all over again.

It's my personal hell,

I am praying for deliverance

And hope that this little stretch

Finally comes to an end. ... I hope so too. This is like you said, Everyone has a personal hell at one time or another. Great imagery, wonderful writing.

[Emily B]

Something like this can only be written by someone going through personal experience. Wonderfully written.

[Marie]

Great work.

[Megan]

This poem expresses pain vividly, like the bewildered moments you find it hard to breathe. You definitely stole my attention, I admire the way you can describe emotion.

[Dezaraye]

This is a very emotionally charged write. Your pain comes through the words so clearly, I could feel it. I love the upfront feel of this, very well written.

[TL Boehm]

that burn within. I've felt that keenly and this poem of yours brings that feeling back. You have a way of getting to the core of the feeling - quickly and articulately. Well done, San.