Throw a stone

Came to me when i was skipping stones in a pond

A Little boy throws

A stone in the lake

And causes ripples

On the tranquil surface

Or does the stone

Not plunge

But go                                  

Skipping ahead to

The centre of the lake

And silently does drown

Into the very lake

It has now conquered.

Reviews

[Legion]

Nice flow and ebb. :)

[W.k.kortas]

"...drown/Into" was a little problematic for me; "drown/In" would seem to be the logical word choice here. It's a lovely picture, but, at least to my way of thinking, isn't realy much more than that. I think this is a piece of fine poem, but it strikes me as being incomplete.

[A.T.B.]

This parable is of course full of deep meaning. It is simple but not simplistic. There are ways to get the little boy out of the picture without eroding the intensity of the poem.

[Emily B]

You've drawn such a full, complete picture with such few words. That, to me, is the most wonderful poetry. Simplicity in words to describe great ideas.Tam sent this and I'm so glad she did.

[Brette Medb]

Never truly conquering anything in this... what we once thought we have overcome can sneak up on us and take it all back... great write!


Brette

[Dezaraye]

I agree with Tammy here. The metaphor is perfect. It's such a vivid piece, I can see the clean, crisp surface and I watched the stone fall. Lovely job.

[TL Boehm]

profound writing Santulan. I don't think I've read this one before but then over the past few months I've been out of touch with you. I am so happy you are here now so I can read you again as I have missed you.
The metaphor works so well in this one...drowning in what we conquer. Resonant.