Here I am

Here i am, standing silently in the rain
trying to clear my thoughts out
getting back to the day we once met
how nervous i was, and the dumb things i said
and yet there you were smiling with no doubt
giving me one more chance to start again

Here i am, trying to make some sense
out of the words that i couldn't say
On that beautiful night on the month of may
when i was ready to be more than friends

Here i am, sitting in the beach sand
watching the sun set far away
In the same place you said good bye
with a kiss and the soft caress of your hands
And yet i could see a tear slipping away

Here i am again trying to write something
The minutes have passed by with no hurry,
pieces of paper are around my trash can,
in front of me is a paper sheet on blank,
'couse i don't know how to say that i'm sorry

Reviews

[R.W. Blue]

Besides the lack of capitalization, and periods, the poem is pretty smooth. It took a while for me to make sense of it all, especially since paragraph two through me off a little. What I don't really understand is why did she give you a kiss and caress goodbye if you were just friends. Maybe I'm just ignorant of those feelings. All in all though it was an enjoyable read that, if molded a bit, could go a long way.

[rielovella]

Nice poem. Keep up the good work!

[jhed]

great poem..one thing I noticed
"Here I am, seating in the beach sand.."

instead of seating why not use sitting.

keep writing!

[Subjective Sanity]

This reminds me of someone I lost. You really captured that feeling of forever wanting a 'do-over' you will never get. Thank you for putting into such beautiful words .