Shaken

Another day passed by,
Another night to mourn..
Harsh times and bitter quarrels
Test all lives, spare none..

For each breath now counts,
Each soul now prays,
I only wish its over..

I remember that golden past,
When life was full of duties,
Now each moment brings only pity..

I pray daily during dawn and dusk,
Spare us, why so ruthless?
Why so tough?

In His name,
What have they done?
Life is cheap and so is death

Someday Our payers will be heard,
Someday they shall get answered!
Till then, I wait, for the time to pass..

Reviews

[Schatzi]

Hello sansrity sinha,

I really like the first verse:

Another day passed by,
Another night to mourn..
Harsh times and bitter quarrels
Test all lives, spare none..

Overall, it is an intense poem. It is sad and very reminiscent of many of the struggles which are going on in our world today. There was one line where the wording was a bit awkward. The line: "I only wish its over.." Consider changing "its" to "it is over." It would give it a better flow. Other than that, it is a wonderful poem.

Thank you for sharing!

Kind regards,

Schatzi

[sansrity sinha]

hi Schatzi,
thank you so much.. it has been a long time since certain regions have been longing for peace..I feel sad for them and also helpless that nothing much can be done at personal levels..certain news headlines do make me feel how blessed people are to stay with their loved ones when others are losing them daily.

[Schatzi]

Yes, very true.

[JustaGurl]

beautiful words written here

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Prayers make us strong, we pray to gather that courage to fight against the odds... Nice one anyway....

[iamshadowine]

"Someday Our payers will be heard,
Someday they shall get answered!
Till then, I wait, for the time to pass.."

We generally wait for the answers, but hen we ask ourselves 'what after that?'...... Loved the way you've portrayed that in the last stanza! And also to mention an amazing opening stanza!

keep writing :D

[sansrity sinha]

Thank you so much. I only want these bad times to end..thanks for the appreciation:)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!!
heartfelt........powerful.......beautiful.......
when reason has fled the lands.......prayer is what we are left with........
time shall pass......no matter what.........atleast something is yet to be corrupted........

thought provoking and profound.....
i loved it!!!
:)

[sansrity sinha]

thank you so much! :) dark times shall pass...Prayers and cries of innocent hearts will be heard and honored..

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Amen........
you are welcome........ :) :)

[Willard Wells]

Harsh times are with us, yes. Nice write with regard to the life around us. We all must pray.

[sansrity sinha]

yeah..we should all pray for things to get better

[Valentine]

In those places where so many are faced with these things I pray for peace for you. Valentine

[sansrity sinha]

yeah.. I only wish a better tomorrow comes soon and things don't worsen anymore.

[sansrity sinha]

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