What A Beautiful Suicide

What a beautiful suicide,
The night skies so dark,
The stars shine brightly,
Tonight I'll make my mark.

 

What a beautiful suicide,
With a knife next to me,
Alone in my room,
How good shall this be.

 

What a beautiful suicide,
I'd already planned,
Alone in silence,
Nothing could be more grand.

 

What a beautiful suicide,
I don't think I could die,
Come to think of it,
it shall make others cry.

 

What a beautiful suicide,
I'll no longer commit,
I will just mend what is wrong,
I was stupid I admit.

 

 

Reviews

[brenda]

yeah dont die dont end your life like that !0.0

[Edgar's Muse]

Please don't kill urself, I'd miss you.

[Sydney Ellen]

Wow.
This seems so emotional and from the heart. The rhyme scheme you used was the most basic one of all, and you turned that into something beautifully crafted.
The ending is one word: Hope.
Job well done my friend.

[VolturiChick]

wow. ironic ending. good job. i look forward to reading more from u. xoxo

[Sleeping Maiden]

Really well written. I enjoyed it. And such a switch on the end. i wasn't expecting it. And also a powerful message.
Depression can be so hard to overcome. I, myself, still get it.. and its hard to pull away from the darkness.. it can consume one's soul so deep.. XD But great job on the poem! Love it!

[frozensakura]

wow... nice, i didn't expect the ending. good job(:

[Corrupthoughts]

I don't think there is such thing as a beautiful suicide. I adored the ending of this though, it delivers hope that not all our youth is lost to this 'emo', cutting, depressing culture :P And don't get me wrong man, I was there too. But it's nice to see others can pull themselves out of it the way I did. Still, this is a good poem to read to audiences thinking of actually going through with it.

[BrittBratt]

I truly enjoyed this. I didn't think it'd end the way it did. Your gifted. I like this.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

I like how you take us along the darker trails of the hopeless mind and then revise by taking those who would be crushed into consideration~ a thoughtful poetic indeed~

[DearSweetAgony]

Thats really cool.
Typical suicide poetry ends up with well...SUICIDE!
But it was very cool of you to end this beautiful write with life.
I really enjoyed reading this.
I truly didn't expect the ending to be like that.
Well Done!