Suicide Suicide

Suicide, suicide wishing I were dead,
Suicide, suicide deep in my head,
Suicide, suicide cutting my wrists,
Suicide, suicide I am so done with this.

 

Two days, two days let until I die,
Two days, two day till the last tear I'll cry,
Two days, two days until I am all gone,
Two days, two days till the dark breaks the dawn.

 

Suicide, suicide deep inside my head,
Suicide, suicide now I am almost dead,
Suicide, suicide turn out the lights,
Suicide, suicide goodbye and goodnight.

Reviews

[frozensakura]

great use of repetition, nice flow(:

[Allie :)]

At first, all of the repetition that you've placed into this piece was immensly irritating, because it's the same word over and over again, but I read it again, and I thought about it, and I really liked it.
The repetition could be sybolism for the way that death(suicide) is the only thought running through your mind in the last couple of moments.
This piece is excellently simple,and well explained!

[Cocoacandy]

wow... much different than your other writes... i think i like your love poetry better lol... good job though...
*cocoabean*