Sonnet: Barbed Beauty

Delicate and sweet like a desert flower,

Though daring, not without her whetted thorns.

Thriving come sun, withstanding come thunder

Storm. Noon, midsummer, the brazen sun burns

In wintertime she doth not wilt in vain

Come spring, she grows anew, vivid, en volume.

Simply glimpse her colour, to ascertain

Her beauty, Inspire once her scented plume

And fall faint, where soon your love will fester.

The virtuous alone may take her a prize,

Though she demands respect from her keeper;

If un-watered, her ebb will be her guise.

But, I prefer her out in the garden,

Thus, the bees and the birds are beholden.

Author's Note

My second sonnet. Written years ago. I know, a couple of lines have more than 10 syllables. Although, if anyone does review the poem, I simply cannot wait for someone to remind me I've written it wrong.

Reviews

[Rhys Kihill]

Nicely done Sam. I myself cannot write a sonnet, so congratulations

[MADAM]

Ohhh...very nice0w0) It's hard to write a good sonnet, and this one is very nice~ Diction is well chosen and words are well placed and easy to follow (one of my pet peeves in sonnets is wen it doesn't flow, but this one flows smoothly)

[mikeb9183]

Really good. Didn't like the word choice of ascertain. I don't know if you meant to make it kind of sexist where she's like an object and the virtuous man her keeper. That word choice makes me think of very old fashioned romance where the woman belongs to the man. But extremely well written and pretty.

[Sam]

I suppose I should first have mentioned, that the poem IS about a rose, I've just used feminine pronouns. Second, if not 'ascertain,' what word then could I have used with that definition, which rhymes with vain? Or for that matter, has three syllables? Hey? Thank you nonetheless.

[#SecretWriter]

Sonnets are so hard to grasp, I don't know if I'll ever try one but I studied them back in the day. This is really good

[Sam]

Thank you.

[Brittany Zedalis]

This is one of the best pieces I've read on here. Amazing.

[Sam]

It's difficult not to say: "You're probably right" to a comment like that. I appreciate the sentiment.