The Titanic's Ocean Grave

The crisp blue ocean rolls in, and ticklingly laps at my feet, while the grey and foggy distant shore tantalizingly hangs beyond the horizon. I look down, and see the clear, clear water. This is the North Atlantic. This is the mighty ocean empire that swallowed the Titanic. The Titanic is under this very water. The people aboard drowned in this very water. This is the water they died in. Cold, deep, and somber, it pulled them in, and snuffed out their flames. 

Chunks of ice and floes slide slowly by, as seagulls circle around them, unaware of what happened years and years ago, in 1912. Tiny chunks and particles of snow drift and fall into the water. They drift and dance, until finally, they are swallowed by the shimmering, emerald-green sea. 

Reviews

[The StoryTeller]

Wow, that's kind of haunting. It shows great reflection, and yet it's so... cold. That's not the right word. Chilling... I don't know, but it was beautiful, even with the darkness and remembrance of death. The fact of knowing that you are in the very place so many died... And that you could illustrate someone knowing that and how it affects them with such crystal clear description and words that are as clear as the water. i think it's amazing. Great job.

[Koibito "Nickie" Kitsuy..]

Beautifully written but I do believe you can even go more in depth to add even more chill to the piece. You could go into the fact that just a little over 1500 people drowned and possibly even describe a few of their descriptions. Some of the most famous being John Jacab "J.J." Astor, Benjamin Guggenheim, and Isidor and Ida Strauss just to name off a few.... Ok now that I have outed myself on being a history nerd. Wonderful piece.

[~]

A powerful description of what is left lingering into people's minds. Your imagery brings chills with the ice, and wakes up the seagulls in our ears. lovely!

[Samuel Pennell]

Thank you! It's kind of weird. I like this piece, but I ended up being kind of embarrassed by it. I don't know why, but I guess because it kind of reminds people of the movie "Titanic," even though that is not what I meant. If you're digging the writing, I'd suggest that you read "Black is the Devil, and Evil is the Sun" if you're interested. That and "Thunderhead" are two of my faves. :)

[~]

sounds good. will do :)

[Samuel Pennell]

Very nice. :)

[Ruth]

Such detail and weaving, really invites the reader's heart in, superb! xo

[Samuel Pennell]

Thank you, Poppy! These are great words of encouragement.

[Nia Hope]

Wow... you are really good at leaving me speechless. Wonderful piece I enjoyed every letter of it!

[Samuel Pennell]

Thank you so much! What a great compliment! God bless you, my friend!

[Poetic Beauty]

The ocean a very powerful force of nature.

[Samuel Pennell]

Thank you for reading!

[Dayran]

It looks calm but ... you know ... the stories of its history ... of the mighty sea.

[Samuel Pennell]

Thanks, Dayran. It is deceptively lethal. The crystal green beauty of the sea can swallow people.

[....................]

Loved this! As a Newfoundlander I feel an affinity with the sea and its power. One suggestion, though, if I may: in the second paragraph you use the word "slide" to describe the movement of the ice; I would use "drift" or "float" in its place!

[rudelizard]

I am new to this site as of today, and this is actually the first piece I have read so far - and so far, so good.

I really enjoyed the imagery created by your description of the cold lonely sea. In particular, the line "Cold, deep, and somber, it pulled them in, and snuffed out their flames" blew me away. Great job! I look forward to reading more of your work. Good day!

[Samuel Pennell]

Thank you! I sometimes have revelations like this when looking at the cold North Atlantic.

[rudelizard]

I know what you mean. Except, your cold North Atlantic is my Hot Sonoran Desert!

[Samuel Pennell]

It seems like everyone has some natural feature where they live, where they stand transfixed staring in awe at it.