Her Dark and Evil Beauty I

She was dark cloud-hearted, 

And possessed an evil sort of beauty

She had dark eyelashes, dark brows,

And, of course, dark brown eyes

Her heart had dark clouds billowing around it,

And she possessed a cat-like, feline prettiness

in the curve of her hips 

As she stood there, in the snow,

a snowball poised in her hand, 

ready to throw

As the gentle snow 

Swirled silently around us.

 

The snow silently twirled down,

out of the dark and hollow emptiness. 

Reviews

[Ankit Mahar]

Simply beautiful. Although I didn't quite got the meaning at first, but after reading the reviews, I understand how much truth is hidden in this poem. The way we feel when we look at a beautiful girl, it's all described in this poem.
All in all, I find it to be a pretty good poem.
Keep it up bro.
Peace :-)

[Samuel Pennell]

Thank you, Ankit! It is good to know that you could get the drift of the meaning. I guess a lot of my work has hidden meanings, but I think it is rewarding when you can figure it out. I appreciate the read, my friend! Bye!

[TL Boehm]

on the surface this is a simple write but a little deeper....the shadow on the snow...depth against the serene white - and poised to do you harm. Yes. There's a lot going on here.

[Samuel Pennell]

Wow, you nailed it on the head! You're one of the people who really gets my writing! Feel free to check out my other stuff!

I like what you said, though "The shadow on the snow." Chills and haunting. The beautiful darkness.

[Skai Rain]

All I got to say to that is " 'Dem hoes ain't loyal. "
A great and beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing.

[Samuel Pennell]

Haha. Thanks for reading!

[Rachel Anderson]

Wow. It went from being sinister, to light hearted, to dark again. This is such a range! Good job.

[Samuel Pennell]

Thank you Rachel! It is great to see people like you read this. There was some question as to whether people would get that switch in tone, but you got it perfectly. I am glad you did, and that you picked up on that. Thank you for reading.

[icelandicblue]

A heart surrounded by clouds can be cold and snowy. She seemed like a shadow against the gently falling snow and that snow would never be able to mask the evil embedded in her beauty. I like the juxtaposition of your images in this poem.

[Samuel Pennell]

Thank you, Icelandic! I tend to think that the first line about her heart was kind of just a mirror of her looks, and just projection about the way her looks make people feel. I guess I don't really believe that too many people truly have a black heart filled with anger. Sometimes their looks can throw you off!

[willweb]

This beauty which you describe is mesmerizing as is your poem. I little fun, a little light and a big punch of darkness. I really enjoyed this today.

[Samuel Pennell]

Thanks, Will! I appreciate you reading it! It seems like you really connected with the tone: fun, light, and darkness. Wow, that really nails it!

[Einstein Noodle]

wow! a bit mystifying ... mysterious ... with the snowball in hand i was thinking it would turn to some cute and fun conclusion but your closing two lines handed me something quite different .. love the first line ... and this:
"And of course dark brown eyes that" ... is so open ended .. demands that i finish it for myself ... not sure you need the first line in the third verse .. you said it so well in the opening line .. very interesting poem .. enjoyed reading .. again .. i love the first and last verses ..
E.

[Samuel Pennell]

Thank you so much for reading, E! Sometimes, if you look at a girl long enough, she looks kind of evil, yet beautiful. Not to mention that she is doing evil things to your heart. There are girls that look beautiful, but in a harmless way with no complexity. The sweetest beauty from the sweetest fruit is the one that looks evil and complex. She looks beautiful in the way that you want her to look beautiful. Complete other-ness.

This is matched up with the intense, storming desire in your heart to feel something different. To not feel what you feel every single day. A different world. A different storm. And a different heart. She looks beautiful in a different way.

[Avinash]

We ve all been prey to such beauty one time or another. But they still revisit us in our dreams and memories if not life.

[BL]

Dark and light makes a striking scene in this tale, she Reminds me of the Snow Queen

[Samuel Pennell]

Thanks so much! I hadn't realized the contrast quality of the snow and the dark! It was kind of unintentional, but thanks for picking up on that!

[Poetic Beauty]

Nice imagery love the contrast of the snow falling around the dark.

[Samuel Pennell]

Thank you for reading!