The Cinder of the Sun

The cinder of the sun

 

 

The sun is an ember, 

glowing orange and low in the sky

 

It is a burning cinder,

like incense with a trail of smoke rising up off of it,

low and magic

 

Like a mirage, shimmering

in the vapors of the sky's blue aether

 

We see these things,

as we sound the hasty retreat from the beach,

The bending arc of dark blue heaven is above us

-The black of night begins its march across the sky

 

We pack the truck, as an ocean of cool air rolls across the land.

We shiver, as it chases us away,

-we scatter.

 

We swim through the warm evening air,

that flutters through our hair as we drive-

The way is lined with a wild, untamed summer,

children turning cartwheels on lawns,

and fireflies that spark the dark evening air.

 

Sandy hair

Sunglasses

Salty skin

Beautiful girls

The divine summer sun

 

 

GodblessAmen

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

ohhhhhhhhh the summer nights of youth ... i do remember them ... your last verse and ending line says it all but you do a great job of luring me in and putting me there on the beach as the sun goes down ... nice job .. very creative!
thanks for tweeking my memories
E.

[Samuel Pennell]

Thanks, E! Trying to strike that vein of nostalgia. Warmth on the ground, rumbling grey clouds in the sky as the sun sets. Yessir, the real summer for sure.

[Circe]

the imagery here is most divine with a vintage quality, the kind that fills all your senses with its intoxicating beauty, so many lines here made my heart skip a beat, makes the reader want to step inside that world and blur into the scenery, live forever in that moment, exquisitely crafted piece.

[Samuel Pennell]

Circe-Thank you You seem like a really nice person, and I really enjoy your feedback!

[Samuel Pennell]

A spectrum of woven colorful summer love, in your words, Thank you for this enchanting and delightful write.

E.L.

[Samuel Pennell]

Thanks very much! I appreciate people's feedback.

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Amen. Feels mystical like a miracle that brings you down to earth. Well done.

[Samuel Pennell]

Thank you, Brandon. I do my best to give things an originality.

[Samuel Pennell]

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