requiem? absurd!

past crumbled crushes
beneath south high,
riding on poses and prose
honed in men's room mirrors,
i followed where you said
where you led
(to your bed)
i bathed in your
newborn cracks and crevices,
i slept nude, unfettered
in your flowing field of
golden blonde,
our wednesday drunk
ran highest reeds,
a sonorous cadence
of nervous laughter
and curious fingers.
our eyes averted
to morning windows
and static screens,
we wrote off
our crow's nest
of four letter words
(which one best blankets
what we've laid to rest?)
a rush, a glance,
a kiss, a beat,
we split the street
                 (your move,
                  move on?)
your toe tap prance
ignited lights,
i crept a roach's pace,
back to the cracked concrete,
back to the bar
we both despised.

(forward seven months)

my favorite record's on
your favorite scent's on tap.
i'm too gone to leave
you're too good to go.
last year's last night
unfolds between
our tense exchange,
your layover's on layaway,
i still can't pay this tab.
you hide a grimace beneath your grin,
i fly my white flag
at half mast.
                (i'll never see you again,
                 don't see me like this)
bookends break,
embraces fake fidelity,
i still taste you.

(forward seven months)

you outshine the lights
that greet your
graceful entrance,
you upstage the arch
that frames your game,
you're a goddamn angel.
and i'm still here,
still gluttoning this barstool,
and singing off key in my beer.

 

 

Reviews

[Alysa Salzberg]

Oh - wait - I also forgot to say: one of the best titles ever!

[Alysa Salzberg]

This poem really got me. I love poetry but for me it has to be an immediate thing. If a poem is long and I get bored with it along the way, it's over. But if I can continue, then for me, this is already a sign of great success for the author. But on top of that, what you've done here is to write a really brilliant poetic rendering of a relationship. I love this.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

I have to agree with Legion on this one. This is the best poem that I have read of yours yet. It has a wonderful cadence and flow. The repetition of your statements and questions really resound. The intensity between the two lovers is felt between each line. Great job!

Linda Marie

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

engaging poetic in which a vivid human heart opens and disgorges its emotional ink in cinematic patterns and hues that move the reader to engage and respond from emotiona wells~ strong poetic indeed~ thank you

[Chloe Madison Taylor.]

write something s****y so I have something worthwhile to say in my reviews.

[Elissa; the genuine art..]

"i slept nude, unfettered
in your flowing field of
golden blonde,
our wednesday drunk
ran highest reeds,
a sonorous cadence
of nervous laughter
and curious fingers."
Irresistible; I must say.
Yet another great write!

-Elissa :D

[Legion]

Wow. Your best yet. Progression and the lack of within the character. Imagery is superb and the anxiety and angst of this piece is remarkable. Going in my favorites.

[wolfshrew]

you have a wonderful way with words

[Poetic Beauty]

Sounds like opposites attract. I love the honesty and openness of this poem. the flow is a little different for me.