Journey

I don’t want this to die
So for your information I’m going to live tonight
Hold your head in my hands
Feel your warm skin beating
With the breath of life

While it may not turn out like I planned it
This love filled with heartache and pain
I’ll hold on as my bruised heart demands it
We’ll go round again

If we get through this night
Together we walk on a broken path
With my eyes opened wide
Knowing pride is the only thing left I have

I won’t walk away like I’m beaten
I won’t cry and issue the blame
The road I walk may be uneven
But I’ll walk it the same

Reviews

[Arundass TP]

Nicely written poem. A gentle work.

[HoWiE]

Nice work Samuel!! There are some nice lines in here: 'I'll hold on as my bruised heart demands it,
We'll go round again'. You seem to have a flair for this type of work, the rougher side of love - it makes a real change from the sickly saccharine love poems people often post, it is also a nice change from the 'Oh woe is me and my bleeding Gothic heart' shite that I see on here alot - I don't know, someone buys on HIM album and all of a sudden they are all doomed love unrequited and billowy Byron shirts *sigh*. Anyway, again you seem to hit the nail on the head here with another gritty protrayal of someone who is just not willing to give up and turn their back on a less than ideal situation, moreover someone who is willing to knuckle-down and work at it - good show! Enjoyed it chick, thanks for posting. (Oh by the way, you have 2 typo's (I think) 1. Hold you* head in my hands (your?) and 2. With the breathe* of life (breath?) - other than that, great work again). Cheers bitchface! ;)

[Collodi]

A nice poem about the confusion of love.

"I have left" with the auxillary verb immediately before the verb it modifies.