Two parts

You’re holding on.
I’m letting go.
I am the ebb,
You are the flow.
We are myriad of things.
I am the battered dusty wings,
Of a butterfly in flight.
I am the dark,
You are the light.
You are day,
I am night.
We both are silken grains of sand.
Our life slipping through our hands.
I am fortune, I am fate.
While you are love,
I am hate.
I am misery and pain.
You are sunshine,
I am rain.
You are a smile,
I am the frown.
I shed the tears in which you drown.

Reviews

[Helen Woodward]

Hi Sammy, sounds ominous, opposites do attract though and that's what I get from this. It sounds hopeless, but there's that twinge of light in there that emits a small amount of encouragement. This is dark for you so I'm hoping you're Ok? It reads very well and looks stunning, but the content is sad...
Take care Sammy...
Helen.

[HoWiE]

Yeah this is cool - another great painful ode to breaking up. I really liked this (as usual). I particularly liked the final line: 'I shed the tears in which you drown' - simple but effectively laid down I thought. Not much else to say really, I liked it, it was well written and have a nicely sobering undercurrent of sadness and loss. I'm glad I can't write poetry as it's for poofs, but you do it very well, heheh. Nice work chick! Cheers!
Howie ;-)

[Nicholas Hallows]

I really liked the rhythm and pace of this poem. The first four lines are my favourite because they seem to flow so naturally.

You're holding on.
I'm letting go.
I am the ebb,
You are the flow.

Nice. NH

[OceanTropic]

We both are silken grains of sand.
Our life slipping through our hands.

Beautiful line, I really like this. I would like to use this line, can I quote you?? Its just for my own use, it was really impactful I really really like it. I just want to have it on my computer or written down somewhere.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Sammy this poem is so good.. all the differences you listed and the images are fab, makes it easy to see and imagine.
Though sad it is so beautiful...the last line is really clever.

Chloe
xoxo

[Donald Meikle]

Or swim to chase your frown

[Bubo]

Some fab opposites and one positive and one so negative........very interesting read,
captured me with the flow, and made me think!

[desertraven]

sounds like a toxic relationship? though, the yin /yang theory applies here. Hmm, thought provoking, i believe I'll ponder some more
Excellent write,
Sandra :D