Loneliness waits

Pull down the shade.
Block out the sun,
There is nothing left here for anyone.
Just those four walls.
Of brick and stone.
It’s just a house,
No more a home.
The door shut fast,
Caught deep inside.
No where to run.
No place to hide.
Loneliness waits in shadows and shade.
It wants you to lie down.
In that bed that you made.
Push hard enough and everyone leaves.
Pretend you don’t care.
Make out you don’t need.
Just you and your pride.
Locked in all alone.
Looking out on your life.
Just you all alone.

Reviews

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

This is a great poem and it is said pride goeth before a fall .. or i think thats it..

This is sad.. lonely..last verse is a great one..

Just you and your pride,
When it�s all said and done,
Looking out on your life,
Just you all alone.

Very sad thoughts come to mind here.. well written and I love it Sam.

Chloe
xoxo

[James K. Blaylock]

don't we all have that deep seeded fear of being left all alone. like everyone throwing in the towel on us,leaving us to our own devices. that is a sad & horrible thought.

Just those four walls,
Of brick and stone,
It�s just a house, no more a home.

The door shut fast,
Caught deep inside,
Nowhere to run, no place to hide.

[Bubo]

Terrible thing to be so alone..........to
shut others out..........your words carried
the weight of coldness and solitude through
a choice of one............powerful ending...
those with pride have to also learn to back down
now and again..........such a lonely existence.........

well written.

[Anna Marie]

Oh Sam, this was so terribly honest and sad. This has been my life for so long. I had too much pride when it came to some matters and it left me horribly alone. I loved the flow of this piece... natural and easy. The subject matter is a truthful and relatable as always.

[Silvia - Scribo, Ergo S..]

Brutal - no sweeteners in here - in its argument and conclusion. Neatly delivered. Like it.

[Anata]

wonderful!
sad yet true, it made me think about myself while reading, about many others i know.
every stanza flows very good, and the ending is the truth unfurled.
People sometimes forget they need others, and they realize that they do when it's too late, it's hard to get out of the loneliness you created yourself, but there is always a door if you look far enough.
Really wonderful write!