Ticking

The Clock ticking 
Slowly time slithers like a snake 
In waiting for the prey 
Silences all around you can you 
Hear the silent screams? 
She screams 
To be heard from the depths 
Of her soul 
Come closer 
Under her mask 
You can see the 
One tear trickling down 
Her face 
Begging for mercy 
Hearts beat pounding 
But only silence 
Hears her 
 She watches the clock 
Ticking above 
It’s leery 
Smile knowing it 
Controls her present 
Her past 
Future 

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

My mind stretched to a single clock in a long hallway with a lone girl sitting, sitting, waiting, and not knowing.

Nice image and emotional base.

[Simone]

this is amazing! i really love your writing. you are very talented

[khalid]

this is very nice poem but i think if you could use more punctuation marks where needed, it would be more better like (silence all around you can you
......then directly to the next line, it would be better if you said, silence all around you, can you....) or at least you should say can you in the next line...i have really enjoyed it

[Distant horizons]

Excellently done. real fluidity in this piece and could almost hear the ticking :-)