Notes Of Love

Deep love thoughts

 

Notes Of Love/Sami Khalil

These words are thoughts, which blossom within my heart,

are also the roses left for you to pick and keep.

I have realized that we never appreciate the seasons of our lives

until it dawns on us that they have escaped our grasp;

For all things have fragility in life, except true love,

it grows stronger by time’s passing.

And all things are mortal, but if I have to live indefinitely,

I would live in a dream which would connect your soul

to mine, without the chaos of our world.

I have rejected all yesteryear's for you longing

 

and hoping for a future dream together.

I also have hoped that in the wee hours,

your illuminated shadow,

will overcome my darkness with a sunrise.

Even if the sun sets over its lonely hill

giving way to a black coal sky,

you can still see the dreamer in me.

And if we are afraid to show this love know that light

will dissipate any darkness or fear.

For this silent love of mine might go unnoticed

but it will always bring a surprise to light.

I have concluded that all things have secrets

except a shared heart,

it whispers love phrases in the open.

I also have found out that it takes a soft breath

to start a fire, just as you started an invisible one within.

And if it takes ink to write love letters, I would rather write

them with my blood flow.

And if I bleed to death, I know that death can change

the mortal moments but not our eternity.

Reviews

[Érenn]

Well I am a curious guy always out there reading all sorts of writes. So today I end up visiting your page. And it was a delight. I always read an initial work of a writer to begin with. ^^ First thoughts on the poem itself. I love the structure and the flow that is maintained throughout the poem is superb. Credit goes to the fine vocabulary you have displayed here. I must also add that they a good job in invoking vivid imagery. This write packed quite the punch. I loved the tone that changes ever so slightly in intervals as the poem proceeds further down. You have expressed a lot of phases and the end had definitely is one I would call fitting. People have already expressed and interpreted about the write here. I understand it as well. Just thought I would share my views on how the flow and tones felt to me as I read it. ^^ Thank you for sharing ^^

[Rita L. Sev]

Beautiful piece of prose here, Sami. Many wise, memorable and romantic lines:

I realize that we never appreciate the seasons of our lives, until it dawns on us that they have escaped our grasp...

All things have fragility in life except true love, it grows stronger by time’s passing...

I also have found out that it takes a soft breath to start a fire just as you started an invisible one within. And if it takes ink to write love letters, I would rather write them with my blood flow...

Very nice, Sami!

[Pryde Foltz]

I think this is the best of yours I've read yet. Loved the one to your mom. But you've laid your soul bare, here, and it is beautiful. Who wouldn't want to be loved by such a soul?

[quinfinn]

absolutely gorgeous. your wording is profoundly beautiful....it is writes like these which make true poets sit up and take notice. well done!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i also like how you mix darkness and light in this piece.

love illuminates those dark crevasses.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we carry love into eternity...my friend you are both dreamer and romantic...

and your writing is significant because those who love and dream can so much relate to your words.

[I, Rene]

Quite possibly the most beautiful love poem I have ever read, my favorite lines are :
And all things are mortal, but if I have to live indefinitely, I would live in a dream, which would connect your soul to mine, without the chaos of our world.

All things have fragility in life except true love, it grows stronger by time’s passing.

And all things are mortal, but if I have to live indefinitely, I would live in a dream, which would connect your soul to mine, without the chaos of our world.
For I have rejected all yesteryears for you, longing and hoping for a future dream together.

I also had hoped that in the wee hours, your illuminated shadow will overcome my darkness with a sunrise.

Even if the sun sets over its lonely hill, giving way to a black coal sky, you can still see the dreamer in me.

And if we are afraid to show this love, know that light will dissipate any darkness or fear.

For this silent love of mine might go unnoticed; but it will always bring a surprise to light.

[FJ Davis]

Intensely romantic; love without reservation--so badly needed by we human creatures to restore life to our lives.
Exceptional work, Sami!

[Audrey Howitt]

I also have found out that it takes a soft breath to start a fire just as you started an invisible one within.

Such an eloquent line in a beautiful write!

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

How incredibly romantic and heartfelt this is!
"I realize that we never appreciate the seasons of our lives, until it dawns
on us that they have escaped our grasp." So incredibly true!

"All things have fragility in life except true love, it grows stronger by time’s passing." Inspires me to remember...and hope.

"For I have rejected all yesteryears for you, longing and hoping for a future dream together." and this is what we do, when it is worth it

"I concluded that all things have secrets, except a shared heart, it whispers love phrases in the open."

Just a few of the lines that I had to note - all is whispered love.