Still the Queen

Happens to lots of men especially in some countries... Thus is not about me, but I have seen it happens. Rejection is devastating.

Still the Queen                by Sami Khalil

 

For days on end, I waited patiently

Dawdled I did for a timely moment

A ring in hand to offer graciously

Under a leafy tree through bestowment.

 

On terra-cotta tiles, your dad heard steps

Like police boots and heart roaring in fire

In his rocking wood chair, he showed biceps

As the clock melted in dreadful ire.

 

A resounding “No” made no sense to me

Dashing hopes when failed to impress his kind

The butter-fly flew past the glib and glee

For no bells will be heard in anchored bind.

 

I stood back then watching the gulf between

Till two horizons meet, you're still the queen.

Reviews

[Thomas W Case]

Tremendous work. I love it.

[Sami Khalil]

Wowzy woooo! Thank you so much dear poet and friend for this wonderful review and summation.
Be blessed.

[Ken Simm.]

Full of so much. Whimsy, pathos and honesty. I simply love this memorial poem.

[Sami Khalil]

Wowzy woooo! Thank you so much dear poet and friend for this wonderful review and sharing. Glad you like it.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

i admire how the restrained and composed way you wrote this. this is an experience that one will never recover from, but the humble and often humorous way this was written shows the persona's perseverence. a tragic ending, but still quirky. it seems you haven't lost your sense of humour.

[Sami Khalil]

Hehehe! So true and well observed. You are astute indeed. Thank you so much Ern for this wonderful review.
Glad you like it.

[Chris Shaw]

Sadly this is more common in some cultures than others Sami. I can only contemplate on how devastating this situation would be. You convey that emotion so well here. Finely penned lines. Love doesn’t always run smooth. Good to read you again dear poet.

[Sami Khalil]

Wowzy woooo! So true and well articulated dear poet and friend. It is hurtful and devastating as you summed it up marvelously. Thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts and experiences with us.

[Pryde Foltz]

The course of true love never did run smooth ... as the Bard once said.

I really could feel your anxiety and dejection in this write and fell myself cheering you one for another try. Wonderful write, Sami:)

[Sami Khalil]

Hehehe! Thank you so much dear poet and friend for this wonderful review and sharing. Was trying to highlight in many and many countries and cultures about asking the dad for approval to marry the beloved daughter; to give the blessing so to speak. Not sure about the US or Canada, but many countries still practice that especially if the father is the only breadwinner and girls don't work like other societies.
Gracie millee.

[Pryde Foltz]

It is done here sometimes too ... out of respect. But I imagine it is a harrowing experience.

[Sami Khalil]

I agree wholeheartedly. Gracie millee.

[Jeyanthi]

Very nicely written...
:)

[Jeyanthi]

This lines are emotionally equipped...
You know.. there is holding to hope till the last min.. especially during wedding ceremony...
I can up with mention of Gulf_ only to tell of hope not reassuring only narrow escape lol..

Queen makes King feel as king.. she can be Queen .

[Sami Khalil]

All true and well articulated dear poet and friend. You summed it up marvelously. Thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts and experiences

[Arundass TP]

Obstacles.. common in all societies, may be for good or bad. Interesting poem. Nicely written

[Sami Khalil]

Very interesting and thought provoking take on traditions; I have to think on that. Thank you kindly dear poet and friend for this wonderful review. Keep up your good work.

[redzone]

If she were the Queen of Hearts, then 'off with his head' would be heard and 'let the wedding begin'!! but alas, tradition's chains still hold and bind. perhaps one day we will end this property of first father, then husband, and women will determine their own fate.

You never fail to impress with your writing/words, Sami!

Curt

[Sami Khalil]

Hehehe! So true and well articulated dear poet and friend. I wanted to show the power Patriarchs and traditions hold in lots of countries. You nailed it on the head. Thank you kindly sir Redzone for all.

[Pete]

well said and conceived. yes, still a lot of old school countries and families. i guess the writer didn't get the king's blessing on the proposed nuptials. long live the queen - there's always eloping!

[Sami Khalil]

Hehehe! So true and well articulated. It is as you say in many countries in the world. You have to ask the dad's permission in marriage after her: not sure if it is still practiced in the good ol' USA.
Million thank yous for all sir Pete.
I hope you don't experience rejections.

[Pete]

the way things are going, marriage may soon be an outdated institution if it isn't already.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! All is possible.