Dreadful Hearts

Dreadful Hearts                       by Sami Khalil

My nights closely hide rusted knives made real

As I close weary eyes thinking of you

Small boats sail through brick walls head over heel

A brief sojourn in love, endlessly blue.

Truth is a bitter pill to swallow down

Beyond the veil, things look ambivalent

Leaving no room for hope in a boom town

Where lovers thrive mutually content.

My world is crumbling down, filled with rubble

Can't foresee a future without despair

Ravenous birds circling, bearing trouble

Abreast the death of me, slinking the pair.

Dreadful is the heart awash in much woe

Dealt with raw cards, wretched evermore so.

Reviews

[Kelly Scheppers]

Sami, you are our modern day Shakespeare, my friend! What a pleasure to indulge the senses.

[Sami Khalil]

Wowzy woooo! Thank you so much dear poet and friend for this great opportunity and visit. Honored to know you.

[Lydia Shutter]

Such a haunting sonnet, Sami! Truth IS a bitter pill and many refuse to swallow it. There is a feeling of giving up....of drowning in sorrow. Well written. Lydi**

[Sami Khalil]

I agree wholeheartedly; so true and well articulated. Thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts and experiences with us Lydia.
See you soon

[Pete]

an opening that grips and does not let go. there is anguish in these words and between the lines of separation from those we love and long to be with. emotively visual as you paint a wounded soul. most excellent piece of writing.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! An honor indeed sir Pete coming from you. I can't thank you enough. Be blessed!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This is wonderfully dystopian and surreal, haunting as one of Lord Byron's sonnets. It was a pleasure to read it. F.

[Sami Khalil]

Wowzy woooo! Thank you so much Fabian for this wonderful review and sharing. You are appreciated.

[IC]

A lovely sonnet, Sami. First one I have read in my brief time here. The woe you write of is all too familiar to me. There are different causes for heartache and heartbreak but all leave the same despairing impression on us. Our hearts take a beating and our world crumbles under the weight, yet somehow it keeps beating away and pining for more love. The heart is a magnificent conundrum. I appreciate the effort taken to write this form in words that effectively and delicately display your intentions. Well done, Sami. 🙏🏻

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! So true and well articulated. Thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts and experiences with us. See you around

[emmajoygreen]

Your finely metred sadness is so well controlled, Sami... 'don't know how you were/are able to create this poem if true. Otherwise utterly empathic if fiction. ' My nights closely hide rusted knives made real - As I close weary eyes thinking of you '

[Sami Khalil]

I love those lines too;I can't divulge secrets more. I'm so glad you enjoyed this sonnet filled with sadness. May your days always be on the bright and happy side.
Thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts and experiences with us.

[emmajoygreen]

As long as they reach gentle eyes and kind hearts is what matters, Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

OMG! So true and well articulated.

[Anita Frader]

Dark, romantic, heartache. This is written so well 👏 🙌 💛

[Sami Khalil]

Gracie millee dear poet and friend. I'm so glad you visited and shared. Much joy seeing you.

[Poetic Beauty]

Sorrow and despair are hard on the mind and heart. They can make us feeling like we are drowning in a quicksand

The rhyme scheme makes this fluid with its flow. The vivid images allowed me to feel the heartache deeply

[Sami Khalil]

Howdy do! So true and well articulated. I agree wholeheartedly. You have summed it up marvelously. Thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts and experiences with us.

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome. Love and passion are magical

[Sami Khalil]

I agree wholeheartedly. Gracie millee.

[Thomas W Case]

Powerful use of emotion and imagery.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! Thank you so much dear poet and friend for this wonderful review and sharing. You are appreciated.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

This is so Poe-ish....he would read this say to himself..."Did I write this? It sure sounds like me."

Those ravenous birds...are they black? Do they appear mostly in a "Midnight dreary"---?

"Weak and weary"?

[Sami Khalil]

Hehehe! All wonderful things you say and compare. He is one of my faves. Thank you kindly sir for sharing your thoughts and experiences with us