Venus

Venus                         by Sami Khalil

 

And it was there that she obeyed the night

Seeking someone with voice, spirit, a heart

In stars and in dismay, burnishing bright

The kind evinced by love found, sans dawn’s start.

 

All the while, the vast ocean of her eyes

Fancied the waves of those formative years

Suspiring fire and finding unsaid prize

Leased to the highest bidder’s price and tears.

 

Shackled by sin, Venus would rather die

Bane to some written in hard-covered books

Disguised as goddess and never too shy

A movable feast to men, caught by hooks.

 

I felt a lone snowman, melting inside

By sun and empathy, enjoining pride.

 

Reviews

[Arundass TP]

I am refreshed by reading this beautiful poem. Good one

[Sami Khalil]

Thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts and experiences.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Is there anything more beautiful than a sonnet?
Your poem is gentle like morning's first light.

[Sami Khalil]

Wowzy woooo! Honored to see you and hear that from a gifted poet. Glad you like it. Thank you kindly.

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Sami,
A most alluring and contemplative piece of magically written Poetry that oozes the essence of mysteriousness wherein any man, chancing to dare court a Venus, shall never truly know where he stands, a bit off balance always of intoxicatingly tipsy in her presence, and blinded by the soft shimmer of her beauty that captivates and ensnares his every thought, his every want, his every deed, his every need, all at her beck and call of enthralled in her shadow, as even that is light in comparison to other women, women who shall never compare as did the Venus of my life, my late wife of 49 years ... But the memories remain, and shall burn on forever as long as I shall live ... A beautifully written, exemplary, piece of writing here Sami ...

[Sami Khalil]

Most beautiful words shared; I feel your loss. All true love and well said. It is a real blessing to find the right woman. May you and her be reunited in Heaven one day. Thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts and experiences with us.

[Troy Henson]

Firstly, the image sets the tone for the upcoming piece. The write is soft, alluring and a dream all in one. Thank you!

[Sami Khalil]

Howdy do! So glad you experienced it that way. Thank you Troy for this gracious review. Good to see you at the Cafe.

[Troy Henson]

You’re so welcome my friend. Great to read you again and so good to be back!

[Sami Khalil]

Welcome back.........

[andrew mitchell]

She has almost the same plight as the mermaids. Nicely executed Sami, you took her by the shackles and showed her the guillotine I like that! Seriously, you got these sonnets down pact! Well done to you.

[Sami Khalil]

Wowzy woooo! Thank you so much dear poet and friend for this wonderful review. You are honored on Earth and in the sea.

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

I read your poem and was struck by the way you used language to create a sense of atmosphere and mood. Your words transported me to a world of stars and ocean waves, where the speaker is searching for love and meaning in a world that can be cruel and unforgiving.
I appreciated the way you used metaphors and vivid descriptions to convey the speaker's emotions, such as the "vast ocean of her eyes" and the "lone snowman, melting inside." Your words captured the feeling of being lost and alone, and the search for something greater than oneself.
Your poem also touched on some important themes, such as the struggle to find meaning in a world that can be harsh and unforgiving, and the way that love can be both a source of joy and a cause of pain. I felt a sense of empathy for the speaker in your poem, and I appreciated the way you explored these complex emotions with honesty and sensitivity.

Overall, I thought your poem was beautifully written and deeply moving. Your words captured the essence of what it means to be human, and they offered a poignant reminder of the importance of love, empathy, and compassion.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! I love your take on this poem. Amazing indeed how you describe things. You are highly talented. I can't thank you enough.

[Pete]

all well said. roman goddess - an unobtainable ideal. such ideals come with baggage that most of us could never handle. best to leave her where she belongs - in our dreams. i think i'll stick to pizza - less expensive plus they deliver! ... :)

[Sami Khalil]

Hehehe! You are awesome and funny, wise too. Thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts and experiences

[Ken Simm.]

All my life I wanted to meet her. Perhaps I did, perhaps I didn'y .Or maybe I met someone else. Whatever the outcome this is a remarkable and beautiful piece my friend.

[Sami Khalil]

Wowzy woooo! I sure hope you did or do. If not, you found art as your muse. Thank you kindly sir Ken for sharing your thoughts and experiences. Looking forward to more writings.

[Ken Simm.]

I found the same muse for both my arts. Do me the honour of reading my latest to understand that remark if you kindly would Sami. And perhaps remember the last arguement we had with someone that got us blocked. Remember?

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. So true and well said. Will do

[Patricia Wedel]

Venus is my Inspiration… every Night… she guards our Home with her shining Smile… while children dream. Be still my 💜 Heart … my brilliant friend… Sami. As always, Pat

[Sami Khalil]

Wowzy woooo! So true and well said dear poet and friend. Thank you kindly Queen of Hungary for this marvelous review.
Virginia needs you though.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Sami… that is so charmingly Seret. My father’s family was from 🇭🇺.. Hungary.. they came to the USA via the Statue of Liberty and Worked very diligently as Shoe-makers in West Virginia . The grandfather and his two Sons ( my Father Steve and my uncle Bill) Theybeach had a Shoe Shop where they repaired shoes with Leather … whereas Now we tend to buy new 👞 shoes 👠 I like to pretend that I live in Hungary by the Blue Danube River, especially when I write ✍️ some of my Poems. Thanks for being a Bright Light our Site. softly, Pat

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! All wonderful. You are welcome Patricia

[Lydia Shutter]

Venus would not understand the way students learn today. She would be baffled. You do the sonnets quite well, my friend. I enjoyed this one. Lydi**

[Sami Khalil]

Howdy do! So true and well articulated. God help this new generation. Thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts Lydia!