Raw Confines

Raw Confines               by Sami Khalil

 

Rejection stings when we acknowledge facts

For some sentiments are hard to swallow

It takes courage to accept certain acts

Vital is acceptance when minds wallow.

 

Sorry for the rant which I can hold forth

It is tied up greatly with survival

Those who want good fortune must earn its worth

True values are not dead on arrival.

 

Last time I checked life was not so perfect

Irrespective of ghastly spectacled lines

Give feedback to self before being wrecked

For all are burdened within raw confines.

 

Many carry pain into an art form

Bleeding on life’s pages, blaming the storm.

Reviews

[Aura]

This is so true Sami, if we desire a fortune, we must work hard to earn its value and rejection comes with this desire! We don't like rejection but we need to face it to move forward and grow! I enjoyed reading your Sonnet Sami, you definitely did well with the form and it was fun to read, thanks for sharing!

[Sami Khalil]

Wowzy woooo! So true and well articulated. Thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts and experiences. May your Aura never fade.

[Aura]

Thank you so much Sami!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome.

[Lisasview]

Well, you know how much I love a good.... great sonnet and yours is marvellous...
I am thrilled to have read this one of yours, dearest Sami...
I so love these lines...
Those who want good fortune must earn its worth
True values are not dead on arrival.
Cleverly thought out and very well said.
Full with metaphors for all that read to explore.
But, then as the scare crow cried out (Wizard of Oz) if I only had a brain...
I have no idea what made me think of that except to say that you have 172 view and only 10 views... This is really unacceptable...I think people are basically lazy and want to use the site as a platform to get their work read. But don't they realise that if they do not leave feedback, that sooner or later they will have no reviews...no poet friends??
Anyway, just my thoughts exploding,
Lisa

[Sami Khalil]

Wowzy woooo! So true and well articulated about those people. I believe in friendship and reciprocation. I'm so glad and was happy when you joined thr site. I knew talent and kindness when I saw your profile. Thank you so much for liking, encouraging, sharing and excelling. See you soon.

[Lisasview]

You are so welcome... Sometimes I imagine all of us getting together one day around a fire pit and talking...reciting our poems...Would not that be fantastic!
Lisa

[Sami Khalil]

It will be indeed. Util then, thank you kindly.

[andrew mitchell]

This depiction you write of is like the old adage if you fall off a horse, dust yourself and get back on. But we could all start off with a pony first. 😀 It’s funny you attract what you sow I find if you write well you have many followers and become well respected but if you don’t write properly like me lol you just get a nibble but that’s ok it’s fun. Nice Sonnet King Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

Heeehaaaa! Firstly, you nailed the message; so true and well articulated. Secondly, you are a master in your own style, highly intelligent and professional. I think we have some that take time and effort to understand your messages, others that don't want to think and contemplate; they don't care or they are lazy.
No worries my friend; we write for ourselves, for the art, then share.
Stay on the road less traveled, you can see more of the country side.

[Silmara McGarry]

Such great structure indeed! Before the final Yes rejection cannot be the reason for giving up!!!
Splendid writing dear⭐

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! So true and well articulated. Thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts on this sonnet.
read moreWow! So true and well articulated. Thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts on this sonnet.
All rich blessings.

[Ken Simm.]

That last line is so true and well structured. In fact the whole of this comes together perfectly , makes perfect points and impresses me no end with the flowing of your creative skills.

[Sami Khalil]

Howdy do! Coming from you sir Ken is a gift and honor. I honor you, we all do, with your talent, whether poetic or artistic. Thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts and experiences. Always look forward to immerse myself in your art; it gives me more inspiration.

[duff]

The highs and lows are never mastered. We show our hand. Raw emotions forever. No need to apologize when we rant. Great work.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! So true and well articulated dear poet and friend. You summed it up marvelously. Thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts and experiences

[red93]

Don't give up. Many Great and successful Authors experienced rejection in their early careers. Keep Writing ✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

[Sami Khalil]

Wowzy woooo! So true and well said. I thank you kindly for the lovely visit and kind encouragement.
All rich blessings.

[red93]

✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

[Sami Khalil]

:::::::)))))))))))

[Linda alexander]

Raveendra Nath Tagore's Geethanjali was his conversation to Almighty when his spouse was chronically ill and suffering. Tagore won Nobel Prize for his classic named Geethanjali. Each of us has a mini version of Tagore in us bleeding in to pages so that soul will remain calm. Your poem reminds me of Geethanjali. Bereft also brings same concept. I don't remember who the author somebody named Khalil was if memory is telling the truth. Beautiful poem with really footed in facts.

[Sami Khalil]

Javajavaya! So true and well articulated. Honor to mention those 2 great poets. I thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts and experiences

[Pax]

Many carry pain into an art form

I loved that, it is what it is.. We poets tend to resonate pain into art, paint it so that you find it yourself, bittersweet. My burned pages sings of the unsung song. Hidden or widely read, we starve all the same way...

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! Your words are beautiful and poetic. You say much in the few. I owe it to our friendship to celebrate poetry.
Thank you kindly brother Pax for all

[Pax]

You are the best, brother, never forget that, and your most welcome....

[Sami Khalil]

You too. God bless. Take care.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"True values are not dead on arrival"---but we sure do a good job of killing them...
then suffer the pain for them....turning into art, bleeding our regrets...
and finding something to blame...why not the storms of life.
j.

[Sami Khalil]

All true and well said dear poet and friend. You have summed it up marvelously. Lots of it is self- inflicted but not all. We like to deflect and blame anything but ourselves. It takes courage to face the world and humble realizations to consider our mistakes.
Long live professor Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Long live your poetry, my friend.

[Sami Khalil]

Thank you kindly sir.